#7 Standing on Fragile Ice

[twilight_ave]

Title: Standing on Fragile Ice
Pairings: Jaemin & Jaeho
Rating: Angst ( <- light angst perhaps?)
Author's Note: I think i should put more info up but I don't want to ruin the plot as well ^^

He dreams of caramel kisses, cherry-colored lips and the taste of honey on pale flesh.

Wakes up to the scent of spice, incoherent mumbles and shuffling bodies

Comments

[tea_biscuit]

I always use this line, and please tell me if it's too cliche, but I promise you that it is indeed completely sincere: This flash-fiction is utterly breathtaking, heartbreakingly so. I felt Minnie's pain the whole way through and I shed a tear inside my heart for the lie he has to live, the love he has to hide for his beloved Jaejoong. In a way, I believe you have gracefully and effectively touched on something much deeper: the pain Minnie might feel for often being ignored in the public eye in real life; for not really being the favorite. Not many fan communities delve into a more complex, human, and deeper Minnie, but you have managed to do so in such a short story. It's beautiful. Can't wait to read more of your stuff, dahling <3

[twilight_ave]

Awww.. You won't believe how happy you've just made me ^^ *blushes*

I absolutely love Min (and well.. Jae, Yoochun, Junsu, Yunho and the Suju boys .. and a couple of other hot bishies haha) but yes - going back to the point^^ - Min is love and it just breaks my heart that he apparently isn't being loved as much :((

[twilight_ave]

i love how you totally got what i was feeling ^^ It's like, I wanted to Min to break the silence but I couldn't cause he just can't .. you know? (<- might not be making much sense here haha)

[yukare129]

i loved it, but as i was reading there was something bugging me and i dint know what it was for a while till the very end. this might make me sound anal, but 'everything' is singular.

[twilight_ave]

how is it singular? I haven't really studied creative writing so I don't quite get what singular is supposed to mean :) And im totally into comments and criticism (but just really creative ones ;D)so i'd love it if you can tell me more about it

[yukare129]

the thing is, even though everything means, well everything so you would think its plural, but its not. cause the every makes everything singular. like everyone, though everyone maens everyone, the every makes it singular. so when you think of any word with every in it, think of everyone, adnt he one in everyone make everything with every singular.

so basically, it should be

"everything is as 'it' should be."

not

"everything was at they should be"

[twilight_ave]

oh! i actually misread your earlier comment then cause i thought you found everything about the story singular (hence the confusion):)

thanks for having pointed it out ^^ I actually only found out about that now.. Will go and edit

[kieta_seraphim]

MMMM I liked it. I would say something else, but it'd probably come out an incoherant jumble...so gonna leave it at that. Sorry.

[twilight_ave]

don't be, I'm plenty glad already that you liked it enough to comment ^^

[machine_of_july]

Gah! My first Jaemin! I deviated from my OTP, except not really because there is JaeHo in this, but yeah.

And what a perfect fic to slip with! God, your portrayal of Changmin is wonderful. I can sense in him that unwavering strength of will for what he considers "right", and the fragile, delicate pain of his predicament hidden behind his eyes with that careful mask of indifference. Oh man. How dare you make me yearn for Changmin to confront Jae with his feelings XDDDD Yunho is fuming at me in the corner now XDDD

Anyways, excellent. Adding to memories for a recollection from time to time of my first Jaemin deviation (meaning I'll be reading it over probably a billion times when I need an angst fix haha). Thanks so much!

[twilight_ave]

oh wOw!! my JaeMin fangirl muse is bubbling with happiness for being your first *__*

I whore all pairings of the boys cause nothing's sacred between them and we KNOW they just l♥ve each other XD