Pairing: Jack/Ianto, Jack/Ten
Rating: PG
Spoilers: None, I think…
Lenght: 1k words
Challenge: Music
Summary: The Doctor has popped in for a visit. Jack is horny, Ianto is angsty, and the Doctor is still running.
Author’s Note: This very heavily based on the song of the same title from the Stephen Sondheim show, “A Little Night Music.” I was listening to
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I absolutely adore this line: Now, B might be effective, his body was fantastic, but the Doctor was never one to be superficial, probably because his own species changed so much, and Ianto had already seen him naked more times than he’d probably died.
It must be interesting for Time Lords to regenerate in the middle of a relationship. *G* And the Ianto bit was hilarious (and probably almost true.)
Just a couple of grammar things I spotted: "Prefect" instead of "perfect" in the second paragraph, and instead of "illusive" I think you might've meant "elusive".
Congrats on your second fic! I enjoyed it.
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Yay! It's liked! The switch felt a bit weird to me too. I'm not very fond of first person, but I couldn't picture the "soon" section in 3rd person. So I just went with it, and I still like how it turned out *nodnod*
There were giggles! I was hoping for giggles! At least in that section *squee*
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I know exactly what you mean! I'm the same way.
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When is later? When he wants to contribute to a plan it is always later, Ianto, we know. Everyone agrees, Ianto, we’ll listen later, Ianto. You can go on a mission later, Ianto, but we need our coffee and coats.
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But if I were perfect for you, wouldn’t you tire of me, like all the others? Just wait a little longer, it will happen soon, just don’t leave me after.
Lovely, they work really well. (one typo, You have the word "touch" twice in the Doctor's first line, and I don't think it's done on purpose...)
You should tackle the fugue that comes next in the song as a sequel. Perhaps some kind of conversation between the three? Really good idea. I liked it.
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*Head explode at thought of a sequel* I wouldn't know what to write, I'm just not that clever.
*Ninja fixes typo* No one saw that either...
*Glee* Its a fabulous song! Glad you listened to it! Sondheim is a God with words, and melodies, and everything. But I was really worried I was leaning too heavily on what he had already written, so I'm relieved you think I found a good balance.
Thank you for the comment ^.^
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Well, um, was my characterization okay...? *Values your opinion*
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The end was very touching and I have no idea why (apart from the hormones of a young woman) but I had a few tears in my eyes.
Sorry to be a nit pick but I can't find sense in the following quote:
"and all he ever years is later from his friends"
Apart from that... Cool bananas ;)
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Aaawww, yay for touching ending! I wanted something that tied everything together, so I did that, and hoped it worked XD
*Munches on Bananas*
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