When You Go, Don't Return (to me, my love)

[rayruz]

Title: When You Go, Don't Return (to me, my love)
Words: ~3500
Characters/Pairings: Kara Thrace, Socrata Thrace, Zak Adama, minor OCs (Some K/Z at the very end)
Rating: PG-13 for dark themes
Timeline: Pre-series
Summary: After two visits to the emergency room, young Kara notices her mother beginning to act differently towards her.
Warnings: Story

Comments

[stripes13]

Wow. Such a great job with this, Ray.

[rayruz]

Thanks.

[kag523]

Such a difficult story to tell, but you've done it in such a raw, evocative way. Well done! K :>)

[rayruz]

Thank you! :)

[thegreenkitty]

Really well done, Ray.

I especially appreciated the "no one deserves to get hit, Kara". Also the social worker scenes were so frustratingly, heartbreakingly accurate. The scene with the black paint was perfect.

[rayruz]

I was really stuck on this for a while, and then decided that I was just going to write the black paint scene and it got me unstuck. (Sorta the reverse of the white paint scene? IDK.)

Glad you enjoyed.

[grey_sw]

I love this. It's a perfect look at the Catch-22 that was Kara's childhood -- the way she "proved her mother wrong" with the black paint was beautiful and terrible, all at the same time. I especially like how Zak managed to say just the right thing, just the right truth: "no way we’re ever going to know, unless we try". Great job!

[rayruz]

Thank you. I'm so glad you liked it. I just sort of wanted to explore a little bit of Kara's past, because she sabotages herself quite a few times on the show, and it had to originate somewhere right?

[shah_of_blah]

Oh Ray, this is so wonderful that it hurts. It's just so Kara. I'd like to leave a more detailed review, but it just made me feel all sad and achy and like I just want to wrap little Kara up in a hug.

[rayruz]

*gives you (and tiny!Kara) a warm blanket and hot chocolate*