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Partners in Crime

Jan 07, 2010 02:23

Title: Partners in Crime
Pairing: Kara/Lee
Rating: NC-17
Setting: Pre-mini
Words: 1589
Written for bsg_pornbattle prompts "Don't tell Zak", "bad pickup lines", "what about tomorrow"

( Partners in Crime )

pairing: kara/lee, #bsg: lee, length: over 1000, rating: nc-17, #bsg: kara

Comments 34

callmeonetrack January 7 2010, 15:12:29 UTC

Wow, I loved this!! I could actually see this happening as a result of the table near-frak. So powerful and tense, and as I said at the PB--the voices were perfect, Kara especially.

And the ground rules bit? Unnngh.

I almost wish the last line was "This is their normal". I love that line.

Soooo good. YUM.

rayruz January 7 2010, 15:15:43 UTC

:D Thank you bb.

I'm glad you liked the ground rules bit... part of me was wondering if I should go there, but then I decided to go for it. Go for the angst and the guilt.

Glad you liked it.

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rayruz January 7 2010, 15:33:48 UTC

I know. I'm quite conflicted. I've never written anything quite like this before. I blame the pain meds! :D

They're in such denial, though.

Glad you liked.

eugis January 7 2010, 16:01:34 UTC

WOW Ray this is... WOW. You can feel the tension when they stare at each other. And it is so hot and painful because you know they want each other so badly. Oh pilots. Sigh.

So so frakking good!

rayruz January 7 2010, 17:04:32 UTC

I think this is gonna get incorporated somehow into my big bang fic. *nodnod* Oh they're so dirtybadwrong today.

aurora_0811 January 7 2010, 16:18:27 UTC

Where have you been hiding this super hot angsty smut from us?! My brain is all ahfaihfeaihgab!

This fic has really pinpointed exactly what I really really love about your fic. You have such an amazing ability to put emotion into words. I'm not just reading words but I'm feeling exactly what the pilots feel. Angst, longing, sadness, guilt...it's all there and it's not overdone or contrived. Perfect!

I loved the ground rules bit and their reactions right after, so hot then so guilty. Guh!

rayruz January 7 2010, 17:06:07 UTC

I blame the percocet! It's turned off my inner censor.

Thank you! This one did flow pretty naturally when I started it.

Oh the ground rules... guh... I struggled with that part a bit. Which one of them would decide that was going too far. I did settle on Kara (obviously)... but guhhh... glad you liked it! :)

workerbee73 January 7 2010, 16:22:08 UTC

WOW. I'm right here with the masses. Hot hell and damnation. VERY well done, my friend.

**still soaking up the hot wrongness of it all (and loving it)**

rayruz January 7 2010, 17:03:08 UTC

:( Our poor babies.... they're not good at doing the right thing are they? Or the good thing? *sigh* Poor them... and Poor Zak too while we're at it!