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[tubbo_scribbles]

our story so farTimmy was supposed to do something simple. All he had to do was walk up the front steps and knock on the door. It was easy. A few of the other kids had seen it in a movie and figured it'd be funny if Timmy ran away scared. Unfortunately for them Timmy did no such thing. Now a days knocking on an abandoned house isn't a big deal

Comments

[mrstevo]

there should be something supernatural about the tunnel, either it leads to another world or a faraway place, or it's a time lapse into the past or future...

or when they come out of the tunnel, it's a year later.

[chimalis]

i like the year later idea, but the supernaturality makes for a pretty stereotypical story already. unless you can back that up with some sort of science or keep it to a minimum, it makes it just dumb.

[chelebelle]

Yeah no other dimensions, that would just get to complicated and probably cliche.
The time thing could work but I think it should be more then a year. How old are theses kids? Maybe they come out of the tunnel and see themselves in highschool, maybe they find out something about their immediate future that they have to change. But that could be a little to back to the future. It really all depends on how you write it. It could be really good if done right or it could be cliche, its a thin line.

Or maybe the tunnel was part of the underground railroad, or used by bootleggers. But then we'd have to get into actual history which is ok if you want to do the research.

[darkwing_duck]

the joy of such a broad and ambigous beginning is that there are no deffinates. The kids could be any age from 8 to 19.

I like your ideas

[darkwing_duck]

working off a few of your thoughts here's a rough sketch of an idea. what if the house is a nexus of sorts and the tunnel is hwo you get into it for real. It could throw the kids into a different dimention where they could see the world they came from but not be able to affect it. Kind of like a transpanency onto of a photo. you can draw on the transparency but you never draw on the photo....I don't know how it'd work but like I said it's a rough idea.

Re: I like your ideas

[chimalis]

that's cool. so the tunnel is a worm hole, so to speak, to a dimension we can't see and don't know anything about. since they're in the invisible dimension, they can't be seen or heard by anyone in the normal three, and they can't affect the world in any of the ways they're used to.

they'll have to learn how to handle this new world -- apprehension isn't the problem, it's that they have to figure out how to show the fourth dimension to people that can't see or hear them ... in order to ever get back to their real lives! (dun dun duh!) i think somehow the way back should be shut.