Ringer Fic: Hypocrisy in an Elevator (Bridget/Andrew; G)

[agirlnamedtruth]

Title: Hypocrisy in an Elevator
Prompt: Hypocrisy and Love in an Elevator
Word Count: 115
Rating: G
Original/Fandom: Fandom; Ringer
Pairings (if any) Bridget/Andrew
Warnings (Non-Con/Dub-Con/RPF etc): None
Summary: Bridget reflects while the elevator ascends.

Comments

[serialfiller]

I am not familiar with the fandom, but you use the two prompts very naturally. Your opening and ending are active and engaging.

I think that you were probably trying to keep it close as possible to 100 words, but I would really like to see more. I would like to see what she is doing in the middle in scene. Is she nervous? Is taping her fingers on the side, looking at the ceiling. Is she checking herself out in the reflective back of the elevator to make sure she is super cute when she tell him he is forgiven? (Ok I doubt this last one. )

From the first few lines we immediately get not only a sense of what is on Bridget's mind but of her character. It makes me wonder about the canon, which has to be a good sign!

[agirlnamedtruth]

Yeah, I always aim for 100 words and always go that little bit over.

It's a very unusual and dramatic show, if sometimes a little hard to keep up with but I certainly recommend trying it, if you're curious. It's never boring ;)

Thank you for your feedback :)

[ami_ven]

Very nice! I especially love the setting/symbolism of the elevator.

[agirlnamedtruth]

Thank you :)

[elevatorpads]

Very entertaining!

[agirlnamedtruth]

Thanks :)