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FIC: Limited (1/1)

Nov 08, 2010 23:53

Title: Limited
Author: tromana
Rating: T
Characters: Jane/Lisbon
Summary: She’s his anchor, his life raft. She keeps him floating when he would otherwise drown.
Disclaimer: Not mine
Spoilers: 3x03 The Blood On His Hands
Notes: Written for muse_on_drugs in the mentalistprompt fic meme. Prompt: “You can’t protect me from your own death.”

( It’s not as if there’s another side waiting for him, anyway. )

character: teresa lisbon, tv: the mentalist, fanfic, character: patrick jane, pairing: jane/lisbon

Comments 4

johnsheppardluv November 9 2010, 11:30:24 UTC

THAT. WAS. AWESOME!!!! :D

I love the way you used semi-poetical language. And your characterizations were wonderful as well. Lovely story from start to finish, mate! You WILL write another one SOON though, right? *makes puppydog eyes at you* Pretty please, with coccy covered Jane and Lisbon clones on top? :S After all, you've painted them (& theort broken-ness) SOOOOOOOOO well and so realistically that my mind's eye totally sees your actions and words from this beong said and done by the show's actors and actresses as clear as day. :)

Bravo! BRAVO! *hugs*

~your pal,
Sharma :D

tromana November 9 2010, 14:28:36 UTC

Thank you very much.

This was an experimental style for me - and I had a lot of fun with it. I'm pretty much constantly writing - I archive a lot over at fanfiction.net mainly because it's the best place for posting chaptered fics.

I'm so glad you found this realistic; that is absolutely always my principle aim when writing. I was also quite paranoid when I first posted it, so knowing that people like it means a lot.

Thank you!

johnsheppardluv November 11 2010, 08:56:09 UTC

I luv experimental styles too actually! :D I usually use unexpected POV switches instead of actual lyrical language (aka the short bursts of writing like you used here). In other words, I like it when I feel comfortable enough with a group of characters to effortlessly switch from being in one character's head to another's, and yet the reader knows who's heads I went into every without me durectly pointing them out. So, I try to paint distinct ways in which each character thinks or speaks ( ... )

tromana November 11 2010, 09:52:11 UTC

I find if I use one style all the while I just get bored of writing. I need to mix it up more to make sure that I just don't get fed up. Don't understand these writers who stick to one tense/one POV/one style. I like fics to have their own identity, but still read as though it's mine. That's... fun.

Oh thanks for the links! I'll definitely have a read later. When I'm feeling slightly more awake and can appreciate it. :-)

Paranoia is the worst part of writing. Sometimes, I can be ambivalent about something and not so worried, then other times it drives me insane. I just want to know what I'm doing right/wrong. *hugs back*

Thank you once more. :-)