Comments | tromana: FIC: fool for you (1/1)

tromana

FIC: fool for you (1/1)

Jul 25, 2010 19:34

Title: fool for you
Author: tromana
Rating: T
Characters: Jane/Lisbon
Disclaimer: Not mine.
Summary: Fighting against yourself is never a good thing.
Spoilers: Up to and including 2.23 Red Sky in the Morning
Notes: Written for yaba324 in the mentalistprompt fic meme.

( He wanders off and makes some sort of a mess and you’re the one left to pick up the pieces. The proverbial knight in shining armor. Mother Teresa, in more ways than one. )

character: teresa lisbon, tv: the mentalist, fanfic, livejournal: meme, fandom: ficathon, character: patrick jane, pairing: jane/lisbon

Comments 6

corza_laura July 25 2010, 19:40:38 UTC

Beautiful! I love your fanfics, they're always so full of heart. I hope you keep writing so good stories =)

tromana July 25 2010, 19:41:41 UTC

Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

spyglass_ July 25 2010, 20:05:44 UTC

Okay, first things first, you wrote this in second person and made it work. So kudos! I know from experience that isn't easy to do.

This is lovely and poignant and kind of wistful, struck just the right tone for me. I wanted to say more, but this window has now been open for over 20 minutes and apparently I am incapable of forming coherent comments. SO YOU GET CRACK!COMMENTS INSTEAD. ~enjoy.

Seriously, though, this was excellent.

tromana July 25 2010, 20:07:51 UTC

I like writing second person and do it way more often than I should, but reading it back is sometimes... ahem, interesting. I don't even know WHY I started writing in second person this time. I JUST DID.

Crack!comments are always much appreciated. AND I CAN REPLY BACK FASTER. HA!

Thank you! *hugs*

thisisagift July 26 2010, 23:49:02 UTC

Oh gosh this is so lovely. You got Lisbon totally right, and the last 2 lines KILLED me.
And i love the song by the cranberries at the bottom, so thats awesome too :)

tromana July 27 2010, 06:17:20 UTC

Thank you so much! I love writing for Lisbon so much, so I'm glad to hear I'm doing something right!
The song is wonderful, isn't it?