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stupid

Nov 13, 2009 20:27

Title: stupid
Pairing: Donghae x Kyuhyun; Super Junior
Rating: R
Word Count: ~2700
Notes: Not quite sure what I’m doing with characterization but let’s see how this goes.
Summary: Kyuhyun is stupid for Donghae.

( Kyuhyun smells sweet aftershave and salt sweat, tastes peppermint that lingers delicious on Donghae’s tongue, groans curses and prayers into that pretty, pretty mouth. )

c: donghae, p: donghae x kyuhyun, c: kyuhyun, g: super junior

Comments 84

kohie November 14 2009, 01:35:01 UTC

eeeehehehehe

kohie November 14 2009, 01:41:43 UTC

psssst, coding fail!

- oh god he knows Donghae has to know this is horrible -

kohie November 14 2009, 01:53:12 UTC

kjldfgndf hjkwesf i have to get this out before i can try my hand at a somewhat coherent comment, um, HOW DARE YOU MOCK KYUHYUN'S ACNE!

nyw November 17 2009, 00:54:02 UTC

cutest. dance. ever.

Thread 9

taintedkibou November 14 2009, 02:23:24 UTC

Kyuhyun is such an insecure, adorable, sexy-voiced... mmm! *has no better description* XD

As always, everything you write always manages to draw me into the universe.
I'd say for you not to be too hard on yourself, but writers are always their own worse critic ^^;

And yes, Donghae, stay away from Sungmin's things xD

trivialaffair November 23 2009, 18:34:32 UTC

LOL I seriously am my worst critic, it's sometimes devastating for my already pathetic ego ::clings::

Thank you for giving this a try, dear.

lastingdreams8 November 14 2009, 02:50:54 UTC

I have no idea if this is OOC so I read it as face-value, and it was AWESOME :D
It's cute, and I can imagine Donghae with that smile :D

trivialaffair November 23 2009, 18:35:24 UTC

LOL it's okay. I was writing at face-value, if you will lolol. aldkmfalksdf Thanks for reading anyway!

speckled_writer November 14 2009, 03:20:43 UTC

Damn you and your ability to make me look up new bands on YouTube *shakes fist*

I love the way you write; this was gorgeous even though I don't really know anything about the guys in question.

And just how many guys are in this band? They seem more like an overly affectionate men's choir than a boy band.

trivialaffair November 23 2009, 18:36:23 UTC

aldkmfalkdfadf Suju is kind of ridiculous, this is what I've learned the past few weeks.

THAT IS PROBABLY THE BEST DESCRIPTION OF SUJU EVER. YES, YES THEY ARE AN OVERLY AFFECTIONATE MEN'S CHOIR ALDKFMALDKF LOLOL ILU

chauxe November 14 2009, 03:36:04 UTC

a maelstrom of long graceful limbs that catch the light
you. you. with language like that why in the world are you sorry? I'm kind of quivering right now, bb, and you know that I am not even in this fandom gfldjn.

The start goes something like this.

And they begin.

♥

chauxe November 14 2009, 03:38:33 UTC

also there are people reading this - multiple people - that do not know suju. I say that's proof of your awesome right there. ♥

trivialaffair November 23 2009, 18:37:23 UTC

lakdmfalkdmfaldkfadlfkadf ::loves::

trivialaffair November 23 2009, 18:36:54 UTC

lkdmflkadfmasdlkfa it was mainly characterization I was worried about, but. Oh you ::clings::