Brigit's Flame Week 2: It Hurts When I Do This

[triplescorpio]

It wasn’t bad, as winters go, most people were saying.  Cold, of course; you’d expect that in Indiana.  And dreary.  It seemed that the sky had remained leaden gray since November.

On this late January afternoon Annie was standing by the front window, looking out on the neighborhood street.  Houses were fairly large, and set back

Comments

[attentionhoard]

First- how awesome. I'm in Indianapolis, too. Well for the summer. Going to Ball State during the year.

Second- I really enjoyed your piece. It was subtle and among the heavy, heavy subject matter we've had written about/repeated this week I enjoyed it quite a bit!

[triplescorpio]

I actually live in Muncie! And commute to Indianapolis for my job as a middle school counselor for Indianapolis Public Schools! My son is at BSU. What year are you? And thanks for the compliment on my piece. I appreciate it.

[triplescorpio]

I just realized you are one of the icon artists I snatched an icon from! Congratulations, you are very talented!

[wickedmommy]

So well done. It was a great slice of life and had such a real feel to it. Good luck this week.

[triplescorpio]

Thanks so much. Interestingly, I've just read yours and had decided it got a vote for sure. I love the characterizations and your writing style also has a realistic feel and keeps the interest going. I was very impressed. Good luck to you too.

[wickedmommy]

Thank you so much! I really apprciate the kind words.

[szalotka]

Nicely done, you write dialogue really well.

[triplescorpio]

I loved your piece as well. Thanks for the compliment!

[0_dizzynoise_0]

This was really good because of how simple it was.
Separations and kids and visitation are all things that aren't black and white at all.

You made this powerful by saying it just how it was. It was as if you snatched this right out of someone's everyday life, and got the emotion exactly right.

Great job! Good luck!

[triplescorpio]

Thank you. Actually, this was a real situation, changed slightly of course, to protect the guilty. I tried hard to keep the emotionality in balance.

[forallyouare]

this was really great. i don't have anything to add, except to please write more about these characters at another challenge

[triplescorpio]

Thanks so much. And I do like the idea of continuing their story. I really appreciate your comments.