FNL Fic - Agincourt

[treehero]

 
Give all of us gathered here tonight the strength to remember that life is so very fragile.

Eric felt that his life was defined by touches. Slipping his fingers into Jason's slack hand, he remembered so many of them. The ones just felt - his arms around Mitch. His hand touching Joanne's shoulder. Tami's arms around his shoulders. Julie's

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[melkvrouwtje]

wow. this fic is a whole world.

[elzed]

thank you for the cool cloth on that back of my neck

Yeah - exactly.

[maryilee]

Wonderful, wonderful job! I love the whole structure of this; the way each part relates to the voiceover. Excellent!

[shelbecat]

I bookmarked this to remember to come back and read and comment when I had time to devot to it. It's so lovely. Everything you write is so lovely.

Staring now into Jason's face, through the ugly metal halo, Eric felt terrified. He felt cheated. He felt ashamed.

Slipping his fingers into Jason's slack hand, Eric felt life.

I love this. How Eric is "feeling" various things in his heart and then "feeling" Jason's very changed life with his hands. In his hands. At his hands. It's a great comparison.

The whole section about the fathers and how he feels as though he's let his boys down for the father's mistakes. So painful and touching.

And then at the end...

I look inside and I am feeling better. In this moment on the balcony with the cool air blowing and the lights gleaming and a State champion cap inside on the bed, I feel life.

When Tami's just told him about the life growing inside of her and how that makes him feel life inside of himself again.

Again, lovely.

[shelbecat]

you did a really nice job with this. i really liked it and enjoyed reading it