Comments | treatallanright: Lessons Learned

omteddy2006 in treatallanright

Lessons Learned

Jan 29, 2010 10:45

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rating: pg, author: omteddy2006, char: allan, intercomm, cat: short fic (1001-5000 words)

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jagnikjen January 29 2010, 17:30:45 UTC

I sure would like to have seen what might have happened had Allan stayed at least one night.

But excellently written, as always.

omteddy2006 February 4 2010, 17:59:50 UTC

I sure would like to have seen what might have happened had Allan stayed at least one night.

Sorry, Hun, but I try to stick with the innuendo only. I would have to get another author to write that part!

And, thanks.

jagnikjen February 4 2010, 18:08:29 UTC

Maybe I need to stick with innuendo...I know my love scenes definitely need improvement. But I keep tryin' anyhow.

omteddy2006 February 4 2010, 18:40:56 UTC

I've tried a few with my original fic. Not really my thing. I'll keep trying too!

ctquill January 30 2010, 07:33:32 UTC

You had me for a second when he broke down - but of course he stole her ring. It was never going to be easy to reform Allan. Great fic!

omteddy2006 February 4 2010, 18:00:50 UTC

I was hoping people would be taken in by the sobbing (as was young Allan). Thanks for reading!

ironmaidenlove February 2 2010, 01:11:46 UTC

Wonderfully written. You capture Allan very well.
It's just too bad he can't accept that he could be something better.

omteddy2006 February 4 2010, 18:01:32 UTC

It's just too bad he can't accept that he could be something better.

I think part of him WANTS to believe. Poor guy.

Thanks for reading.

whytewytch4 February 10 2010, 02:17:35 UTC

Can't believe I didn't comment on this one! Loved it, loved it, loved it! Poor Allan--if it was raining soup and someone handed him a spoon, he'd still take out a fork, wouldn't he?

roh_wyn February 28 2010, 05:25:58 UTC

Wow, sometimes Allan just can't catch a break, the poor man...

This was so entertaining, even if a bit sad. Well done.