Comment #2 cuz I couldn't stay away.melissasdavidFebruary 5 2007, 21:08:25 UTC
OK, had to come back to these. Am hiding at school (which I dont even have today so I can read and write in peace)
Dawn and a mother’s kind eye found them shivering in each other’s arms in front of the dying coals.This right here brought the first set of tears, the second time around, the first time I was just trying to keep breathing
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Re: Comment #2 cuz I couldn't stay away.trascendenzaFebruary 6 2007, 01:12:35 UTC
I wish I had better words to tell you how much these little snapshots mean to me, more than you know, I am sure. Oh, honey. You've left me speechless. I don't know what to say other than... thank you from the bottom of my heart. I know you don't say things like this lightly, and believe me, I am just stunned at the depth of your appreciation and kindness.
I love this Sheer...those whitened knuckles showing all the turmoil in his repressed words, that still meant all they said. Oh, I'm so glad that came across. The hardest part of it all is that Ennis isn't a man who can let go of Alma like Jack could have let go of Lureen, and I'm so grateful that his struggle came across well in those words.
This pretty much sums up why I will never be able to walk away from this. Holy shit. Yeah, it's always that one word between them, isn't it? The one that's bringing them back into orbit together again and again, without either quite having the words to say why...
...holding onto his Jack cuz he's coming back? Just lovely, breathtaking...
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This is phenomenal and I don't know what to say. This is definitely something to think about. Amazingly powerful. Grabs the heart and the stomach. What can I say? but thanks! Love Kate
Shnikes! You sure know how to write. We always focus on how much pain Jack's father brought him, but...well, he was still his father, and it's a hard thing to go through. I want to just quote the whole thing, but I'll contain myself.
Ennis swept his parched tongue over his unwilling lips, seeing that Jack needed it, that he was bleeding up and over.
Yeah, that's the tough part about John Twist's character--as easy as it is to dismiss him as a reader, as a character, Jack doesn't have that option. Poor boy. :( And yeah, I seem to have a hard time writing these two without lots of pain, sort of angst-a-holic, lol.
Simply heart warming, beautiful, and lovely. The economy of language adds so much to the experience of reading these drabbles; it gets under your skin.
And I feel for Jack here, his grief over losing his father. I get that, losing a parent is difficult; it is like losing a part of yourself. But when one door closes, another one opens. I like that Ennis's stood by Jack, keeping his promise, facing Alma and his family.
What Jack and Ennis share is real happiness, a refuge from the rest. I loved this. //Tearing the meat, they remembered Elk, better times. Remembered what life was like before death. “Thanks,” Ennis said. Nothing more was needed. Dawn and a mother’s kind eye found them shivering in each other’s arms in front of the dying coals.//
As always I am taken with your writing style, hope for more drabbles soon!
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Dawn and a mother’s kind eye found them shivering in each other’s arms in front of the dying coals.This right here brought the first set of tears, the second time around, the first time I was just trying to keep breathing ( ... )
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Oh, honey. You've left me speechless. I don't know what to say other than... thank you from the bottom of my heart. I know you don't say things like this lightly, and believe me, I am just stunned at the depth of your appreciation and kindness.
I love this Sheer...those whitened knuckles showing all the turmoil in his repressed words, that still meant all they said.
Oh, I'm so glad that came across. The hardest part of it all is that Ennis isn't a man who can let go of Alma like Jack could have let go of Lureen, and I'm so grateful that his struggle came across well in those words.
This pretty much sums up why I will never be able to walk away from this. Holy shit.
Yeah, it's always that one word between them, isn't it? The one that's bringing them back into orbit together again and again, without either quite having the words to say why...
...holding onto his Jack cuz he's coming back? Just lovely, breathtaking... ( ... )
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Ennis swept his parched tongue over his unwilling lips, seeing that Jack needed it, that he was bleeding up and over.
Guh. Pain and love, together. You rock.
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Thank you so much for the kind words! :)
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And I feel for Jack here, his grief over losing his father. I get that, losing a parent is difficult; it is like losing a part of yourself. But when one door closes, another one opens. I like that Ennis's stood by Jack, keeping his promise, facing Alma and his family.
What Jack and Ennis share is real happiness, a refuge from the rest. I loved this.
//Tearing the meat, they remembered Elk, better times. Remembered what life was like before death.
“Thanks,” Ennis said. Nothing more was needed.
Dawn and a mother’s kind eye found them shivering in each other’s arms in front of the dying coals.//
As always I am taken with your writing style, hope for more drabbles soon!
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But when one door closes, another one opens.
Exactly, exactly. I couldn't have put it better, myself. :)
And my goal for them is, as always, just like you said, real happiness! The trick is how to get them there, heh...
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