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toyzintheattik

Cyber Nights Drabble

Aug 06, 2010 10:34

The other day, my English teacher had us write for 20 minutes in the 2nd person pov. Naturally, as I stared down at the blank page, my thoughts drifted to giant alien robots, specifically ones that run a brothel, even more specifically, Madam Strika giving a new escort a tour of Inamorato. Needless to say, I wasn't one of the students who opted to ( Read more... )

school, fanfic, cybertronian nights, tfa

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wicked3659 August 6 2010, 17:43:10 UTC

Very nice. I could totally see Strika in this. Straight to the point and direct.

Ninjabot would like to know if she even remembers his name though :p

toyzintheattik August 6 2010, 17:53:33 UTC

"Ninjabot" just flows better in her voice, don't you think? It's also very Decepticon of her not to refer to Autobots (other than Arcee) by their name.

My apologies to Prowl. ^_~ I'm glad *you* enjoyed it though.

xxsomeoneelsexx August 6 2010, 17:45:43 UTC

Do not conzume mushrooms. Zhey are for looks. Ninjabot learn zhat ze hard vay.

I bet he did. Now I'm wondering what exactly happened to him. XD

toyzintheattik August 6 2010, 17:57:12 UTC

This is what happened to him, as told by Wicked. ^_____^

xxsomeoneelsexx August 6 2010, 19:16:51 UTC

Ahahah. XDD I need to read more of that fic, obviously.

niyazi_a August 6 2010, 17:50:38 UTC

Now I'm secretly trying to figure out who she's giving this tour to. Obviously an Autobot. *cough cough Cliffjumper?*

toyzintheattik August 6 2010, 17:58:57 UTC

I never gave a name/face to the bot getting the tour because I don't dare add anymore cast members to Cyber Nights. I can barely keep up with the dramaz I'm juggling now. =P

<3

Creepiness follows karanseraph August 7 2010, 00:51:49 UTC

I like the written-form accent. Seems phonetically consistent and still clear in meaning. Though, this makes me want to go write Scalpel-voice 2nd person.

"You lie upon a table, in an operating theatre. Zere is a bright light above you. You vonder how it is you came here. Slowly, you realize zat you cannot feel anyzing, as your parts are being removed."

OK, I just can't make the word "theatre" look right in accent. It needs work, in general.

Re: Creepiness follows hunter_for_hire August 7 2010, 01:10:27 UTC

Oooh, I like him! Don't you dare tempt me with a 2nd RP comm.

Okay, tempt me. Link me one of his posts. =P

And I think "zeatre" could've worked since other parts of his dialogue show that "th" is "z".

Re: Creepiness follows karanseraph August 7 2010, 01:27:14 UTC

http://community.livejournal.com/nolongerlostrpg/3029.html

Note that this Scalpel in RP, is only speaking with an accent (which is fairly slight and based on his description of Cyclonus in AAII). His internal monologue just reads as the English I write it in.

Fic Scalpel was different. He chirped a lot more and rarely spoke in anything but short phrases and had no written-form accent.

Also, his 'sample' is amusing, because Team Chaar is in it: http://ze-doktor.livejournal.com/1005.html