Fic: The Ghost in the Gears (Sylar/Mohinder)

[torolulu]

I.

My name is Mohinder Suresh.

I was born April 8th, 2015, in Chennai, India.

My father, Chandra Suresh, was murdered at 11:53 PM on September 28th, 2047, by a man named Sylar.

My father was a geneticist who believed that people all over the world were being born with mutated genes that granted them extraordinary abilities. A book

Comments

[blossommorphine]

....

/soulfucked

[torolulu]

I'm sorry!

[blossommorphine]

Don't be, it hurt in a good, crushing my brain way I cheered up when I saw your icon. O_o;;

[alicambs]

Wow! Absolutely fascinating, you hooked me from the start

[torolulu]

Thank you!

[levitatethis]

Holy crap. This is...I'm awed and speechless and want to leave you a brilliantly detailed comment but my mind fingers are still catching up with mind (or is the other way around?). This is a spectacular mindtrip and I'm dying to know where you came up with this idea.

I love that this is from Mohinder's perspective and yet it's Sylar who is driving the story. The idea of him manipulating and recreating this version of perfection for himself -- using Mohinder as that nerve centre -- is incredible. I'm quite taken with the tone of this piece which, with each section that begins almost the same, becomes more ominous and disturbing. One (of many) parts that hit me is this:

“Mohinder, Mohinder

[torolulu]

Wow, thanks!

I think that the idea originally came from a desire to write a story set in the future in which Sylar uses his powers to cope with the fact that he is immortal and Mohinder was not -- this seemed like the most obvious way (well, this and time travel, which I did first). It kind of evolved from there.

I'm glad that you pointed out that section. It was the part about which I was the most uncertain, so I'm very happy that it came across exactly as I intended.

This comment is certainly brilliantly detailed enough! Thank you so much!

[starrdust411]

Wow, this was one twisty turvey fic. You really know how to transport your audience into these strange and bizarre scenarios.

[torolulu]

Thank you!

(The appropriateness of your icon made me laugh. ^_^)

[gaiafaye]

Gahhhhhhhhhhhhhh. Yeah, that was messed up (in the good, engaging way). I love a good crazy Sylar story.

[torolulu]

Messed up is what I was aiming for -- I'm glad I did it in the good, engaging way. Thank you!