Comments | tonghwa: {예민} i like the lights turned out, the sound of closing doors

tarmenel in tonghwa

{예민} i like the lights turned out, the sound of closing doors

Feb 07, 2010 23:35

I like the lights turned out, the sound of closing doors
Yesung/Changmin, 1012 words, pg-13

prompt:
Sometimes, I want to disappear some place ( Read more... )

#crossover: dbsj, !rating: pg-13, #personal challenge, pairing: yesung/changmin

Comments 18

mawaru_berry February 8 2010, 04:53:21 UTC

LSDFGKJSFGHKJSHFGDG

I DON'T EVEN KNOW WHAT TO SAY.

okay, now i do:

this is just…so, so, so good. your imagery is amazing, bb <3

“Everyone was dead,” he murmurs to the floor, “and the only person I missed was you.”

that got me, especially. i had to catch my breath.

He gapes at you like a fish.

lol Yunho. that description is so perfect for a situation like that.

there were other lines, but i should be a good girl and i should do at least a little more work before i go to sleep. even though i probably won't XD

<3

tarmenel February 8 2010, 05:06:51 UTC

KLASJASJGKSGKLASJLKJF!!!!! YOU LIKED IT?! YAY. OMG.

i was playing around with the whole, stream of consciousness... thing, and this is what came out. I was picturing the first part, the "I had a dream that the world ended" part, over and over in my head for this whole day, and I finally decided to just, fuck this, and write it, and weee~ happy fucking birthday, self!

aklgjlkajgsaf thank you bb you are just~ ♥♥♥ agljjsglkaglas i love you.

mawaru_berry February 8 2010, 05:49:25 UTC

YESH I DID LIKE IT!

I love you too <3

makochan_fan February 8 2010, 05:21:13 UTC

asd;faef;sdfasdfkasl;dfieocmasdf

how are you able to whip fics up like this in just hours? gah i want your brain!

“Everyone was dead,” he murmurs to the floor, “and the only person I missed was you.” awwwwwwwwww

You are content with the moments in which you can hear the clock tick by the seconds, slow motion and everything floats around you like dust particles. gahd i LOVE that line. the imagery oh gahd the imagery.

“Um,” you intone, and he looks up at you with those soft, doe eyes. “Won’t I be needing those clothes?”

apparently not; i have a feeling these guys are going to a nudist beach.

now onto the yeteuk bike sex.

tarmenel February 8 2010, 12:23:45 UTC

I can see you really hated it :\ lol ♥!!!!

yes, a few hours, but i've been agonizing over writing for the past three weeks!! DDDDDD": /flops uselessly

You picked out my favorite linneeeee the one with the dust particles. >_< ♥

Mmmm maybe not a nudist beach, but they definitely won't be needing any clothes if Changmin has his way. Mmmmmsex!

rofl omg i love you :D ♥

shihan_ai February 8 2010, 10:27:40 UTC

where the hell is my fucking spot /RAGES

shihan_ai February 8 2010, 10:41:21 UTC

HOLY SHISUS THIS.

OMG YOUR MUSE...DID YOU FIND IT IN MY NON-EXISTENT PANTS XD

BUT SERIOUSLY BB THIS WAS SO GORGEOUS...

“Everyone was dead,” he murmurs to the floor, “and the only person I missed was you.”
MY FUCKING FAVORITE LINE IN THE ENTIRE THING, HANDS DONE. SO RAW AND DARK AND DELICIOUS.

AND I ABSOLUTELY ADORE THE ENDING...HOW CHANGMIN TAKES OUT ALL OF YESUNG'S CLOTHES AND OH THE SYMBOLISM AND GAHHHH SO PERFECT <3

tarmenel February 8 2010, 12:27:16 UTC

ACTUALLY, I THINK I FOUND MY MUSE IN THE FACT THAT EVERYONE FORGOT MY BIRTHDAYYYYYYYY :D

and the fact that i had like, homework to do... suddenly, i can write! damn. XD

kasfjkasjgakljgjkglasfjasfj YOU LIKE IT? /dies happily

akjsfkajff i love you i love you i love you i love you. you make me want to sing. what the fuck.

REREADING THE ENDING MAKES ME WANT TO WRITE HAN GENG'S PRESENT SMUT. :O

AKLGJASLKGAJG I LOVE YOU. JS. /USES KISSING ICON

shihan_ai February 8 2010, 13:55:21 UTC

lol I WONT EVER FORGET YOUR BIRTHDAY!!!

rofl you're so weird, having time and not being able to write then not having time and whalaaaa~

YES I LIKED IT HAHA IS THAT SO HARD TO BELIEVE? BUT YES ANNIE LIKES BEING SUNG TOO =D

HAHA I WAS READING THE ENDING AND I WAS LIKE WHY CAN I IMAGINE THEM HAVING- /slaps self IM SURE MON DIDN'T MEAN IT TO SOUND SO SMUTTIABLE what

IM STILL SLAVING ON GENG'S PRESENT HAHA =D

i love you, ohhhh~

/closes eyes and leans into kiss

Thread 7

javiera February 21 2010, 15:07:44 UTC

I'm debating whether my favorite part was “Everyone was dead,” he murmurs to the floor, “and the only person I missed was you.” because that line is freakin' awesome and beautiful (and is no wonder everyone likes it here), or when Changmin is taking all of Yesung's hair stuff from his bag because I totally can picture that scene XD

I liked how you really took into consideration the lyrics of the song to write this, you make it work really well. And I enjoyed how descriptive you are about the two of them touching, coming closer, but you don't explain much of what's going on, because you don't need to, it's clear with the dream and the phonecalls and Yesung never doubting making the decision to go to Changmin, and to follow him when he wants to leave.

I liked this one a lot ♥

And what's that about "happy birthday, self"? You had your birthday?? I didn't know!!! I would have wanted to say something? When was it?? *HUGS*

tarmenel February 21 2010, 15:22:16 UTC

♥ I love the parts about the dream, and tmi but I thought about those when I was daydreaming in the bathroom. >.> I don't know what it is about the bathroom, but I think really well in there, lol. >//<

I love the song I used but the mood of this fic definitely doesn't match the song. A lot of times when I use sayings or lyrics as a prompt, they always end up being SAID by someone... in the newest fic that you read, I tried to change that but I don't know if the theme came across as I wanted it to.

I like it too. I love their relationship a lot. ♥

^/////^ Yeah my birthday was two weeks ago. I'm twenty!! FINALLY. Gah. I'll have to link you to some of the great fics I got in honor of my birthday ^^ ♥ -hugs!-

javiera February 21 2010, 17:08:44 UTC

I think the most clearly when I'm in the shower, so I totally get it XD

I haven't heard the song, but I'm guessing that's why you didn't add it to the fic like you did with Boats and Birds. I did read the lyrics, so having them so clearly in the story worked, I think.

Two weeks ago which day? It was still february, right? It means it's OK for me to congratulate you, cus is YOUR MONTH!! ^o^ So HAPPY B-MONTH!!! *glomps so more*

tarmenel February 21 2010, 18:30:31 UTC

OH THANK GOODNESS. ♥ I thought I was the only weirdo, seriously. T_T

The song itself is really great, really upbeat and dancey and awesome. I love the Veronicas ♥ but yeah it doesn't match the mood and that's exactly why I didn't put it in the fic. :3

Two weeks ago TODAY! The 7th ^//^ It was my birthday when I posted this fic lol and I was so excited that I had written something ♥ THANKS SWEETIE!! ♥!

krixtalyx August 30 2011, 15:12:43 UTC

OMGGGG

“Everyone was dead,” he murmurs to the floor, “and the only person I missed was you.”

So beautiful. ;_;

Like, are they in HoMin's current dorm? And he leaves Yunho ALL ALONEEEE? DDDD: /okay you can punch me for being so irrelevant

And this is like...the fucking best changsung I have ever read. <3 YAY I WILL SHIP THIS COUPLE AHHHHH MY TWO BIASEDS :') so beautiful

tarmenel August 30 2011, 22:01:14 UTC

oh wow you just jumped right in to the weird fics, didn't you?! !!!!!!

Welllll, when I wrote this they had been split up for a few months? So I suppose... yes? Current dorms? Peh, Yunho is a big boy, he can take care of himself. Changmin, on the other hand, needs his favorite SuJu hyung ♥ :'(

Wow, really? LOL IT MUST BE THE ONLY CHANGSUNG YOU'VE EVER READ HAHAHAHDKJHGKJDHG ♥ They're my two favorites too but ugh their sweet interaction way back when on EHB is what made me ship them so hard 8'( good times

Thank you for commenting! I'm glad you enjoyed it ♥