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fic (fullmetal alchemist)

Jul 01, 2011 04:55

title: Faith and Service, Adoration, Duty, and Observance
fandom: fullmetal alchemist
character/pairing: Riza Hawkeye (Royai)
rating: K+
wordcount: 929
summary: History doesn’t always tell the whole truth.
notes: written October 2004, before we had ANY backstory to work with. Those were the days! Fairly substantial revisions have been done, but the gist ( Read more... )

fullmetal alchemist

Comments 6

kyofujimiya July 1 2011, 17:29:57 UTC

This is a truly gorgeous piece of writing. Very well done and so bitter-sweetly beautiful. Thank you for sharing it.

kittu9 July 9 2011, 04:04:50 UTC

Thank you for your kind comment--I'm glad you liked it.

r_kimono July 3 2011, 22:27:19 UTC

Gorgeous. I will say that I love retrospectives, especially when written like histories, and this doesn't disappoint. Also love that it doesn't descend into melodrama, but retains Riza's unwearying sense of acceptance throughout (even if I wish her a better fate than as an aside to Mustang's career!).

(I've started following this journal, as well; hope you don't mind! But I don't want to miss your writing, if I can help it. :) )

kittu9 July 9 2011, 04:10:44 UTC

Thank you! (I totally always wish for Riza to have a better fate, but I think in a lot of ways, both she and he are just destroyed by Ishval, and they aren't going to let themselves abide by the normal earmarks of success, or hierarcy of needs, or what-have-you.) I'm so glad to hear that it avoided melodrama, especially because I wrote this when I was like seventeen. I mean, I did edit it, but seventeen.

I'm flattered that you're following this journal! Thank you!

flareingfira July 4 2011, 15:51:46 UTC

This is a very beautiful and thought provoking piece. Among other things, I like how you hone in on the fact that the future generations who read their history (or his history rather) will never know how profound the relationship was and how they were each others halves, and equals rather than just subordinate and commanding officer.

kittu9 July 9 2011, 04:12:36 UTC

Thank you for leaving such a kind comment.

They really do have a very equal relationship, all things considered. I'm glad you bought that was conveyed, and happier still that you liked it.