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Water Challenge, Puddles - Thirst

Jan 21, 2011 23:00

Title: Thirst
Author: clodia_metelli
Characters: Thuringwethil
Rating: PG-13
Book/Source: Silmarillion.
Disclaimer: I am not J.R.R. Tolkien and I make nothing from this but my own entertainment.

( Thirst )

character: other canon character, character: thuringwethil, author: clodia_metelli, challenge: water: ice and snow

Comments 16

lindahoyland January 22 2011, 07:13:52 UTC

Very vivid.You made me feel as if i were in the battle.

clodia_metelli January 22 2011, 12:52:33 UTC

Thank you! I'm always a little unsure of writing action, so it's lovely to hear this worked!

someplacetobe January 22 2011, 08:16:40 UTC

Veeeeeeeeeeeeeeery nice. I liked the use of hyphens to break the action in that way, giving it an immediacy so you could feel involved in the action.

clodia_metelli January 22 2011, 12:54:38 UTC

Thank you! I know peculiar punctuation can be overdone, but I tend to give myself more leeway in drabbles (as with peculiar syntax and an excess of colourful imagery) -- it's the best time to experiment. I'm very glad it worked out!

curiouswombat January 22 2011, 13:27:54 UTC

I can hear it and taste it - and almost feel sympathy.

clodia_metelli January 22 2011, 15:18:53 UTC

The almost-sympathy is what I'm looking for with these drabbles, I think. Thank you!

blslarner January 22 2011, 17:27:59 UTC

It is a vivid scene, and love the imagined contrast between the great mother of vampires and the now timid bat hiding away!

clodia_metelli January 24 2011, 19:42:30 UTC

Thank you! That's precisely what I hoped would come across here. :D

wormwood_7 January 23 2011, 04:46:05 UTC

Very visceral One feels a kind of pity for this once feared creature. Thanks for sharing!

clodia_metelli January 24 2011, 19:55:01 UTC

Thank you! It can't have been much fun, hiding out in the ruins of Udun waiting for Melkor to come back...