Shakespearean Cupids (10/13)

[tkel_paris]

Title: Shakespearean Cupids

Rating: T for emotional angst, innuendo, and Jack-style machinations

Summary: When two people are reminiscent of a Shakespearean couple, friends and family are liable to borrow from the Bard himself to bring them together.

Disclaimer: I don't have the money to go see the awesomeness of David Tennant and Catherine Tate in a

Comments

[thenoblethang]

That was beautiful. And good that you pointed out Jenny under all this pressure, because I was unintentionally overlooking that (d'oh!). Poor girl, she really does have to grow up way too fast. Now I'm kinda hating that she got shot off, she would have been such a character to have for at least a few episodes!

I really liked River's conclusion, and how you tweaked what would've been her voiceover at the end - I shed a tear or two. +1 for creating sympathy for a character you don't like. *claps*

Have I said how much I love your chapter titles btw? They're clever. XD

Can't wait for the happy chaps now. I'm so excited! (I just can't hide it! I'm about to lose control and I think ah like it!) :DDD

[tkel_paris]

I'm glad regret that Jenny wasn't around for some Series 4 episodes. Can you imagine her with her parents in "The Unicorn and the Wasp"? I did that a bit in "Belted," and I hope SOMEBODY decides to write a full version one day! I can so imagine lines like, "Mum, why would Dad find you kissing him a shock?"

The chapter titles were a way to keep the Shakespearean theme going. Made an effort to find good lines from MAAN, and I did. I also kinda thought about the "music" I entered for each post, trying to make them appropriate. Don't know whether it worked or not...

River's conclusion needed some tweaking, as you might've guessed from my lengthy author's note, but I'm finally happy with it. I can't say I like her now, but I'm not so inclined to harsh torment anymore. (That said, more comical torments are in her future in another fic...)

(snorts) Ah, the Pointer Sisters... Love that song!

[katherine_b]

Look him up, and know this: I don't share all of his scruples.And this is the whole explanation for the notes you put in about River. You have the same River as we saw on the show. It's Jenny who is different, and thus River is cast in a different light. While the Doctor was looking at his future in the TV version, Jenny is looking at the evaporation of hers in this one: her parents are gone, her own future existence is uncertain, and it's all because of this woman. What's more, Jenny is naturally immature because of how little life she has experienced. How could she not treat her badly

[tkel_paris]

Aw... (closes eyes against tears) You made my day... and the staying up late to post this worth it. Thanks. For all the praise...

I had to have that conversation take place. Those two are alike in more ways than I'd originally thought, and I think Jenny wishes she could've gotten to know Charlotte.

[katherine_b]

Yes, Jenny the way you've made her would be gorgeous around kids. (What, me? Hinting? Never! *ahem*)

[tkel_paris]

That icon has me all but lactating! ;D

Yeah, she'll be a great big sis to little time-babies, won't she...? I know what you were thinking; I read your fics with time-babies! (I think Elizabeth was my favorite; she totally has her daddy's number. "Sliveen." (cackles))

[sczep84]

Ohh this was beautiful, u actually made me like River here. I do like her in s5 and s6 but absolutely dislike her in the s4 episodes, so kudos to u! I love that River's set of memories completely changed and that Jenny's view of her changed too.

And yaaaay, CAL put them together together <3 Can't wait to read more, as always!!

[tkel_paris]

Frankly, what little I've seen of River in S5 and S6 didn't make me fond of her, either. Although it was hard to not like, "I'm River Song. Check your records again." That might've fed into Jenny's comment about scruples.

Jenny's change also made her realize that her maternal family wouldn't approve of her actions. She's worried about her dad's, too...

Oh, you should like what I do have in store... at first. ;D

[nipponophile05]

Am I bad for not feeling at all gutted about River's fate? I admit, she did come across a little more likeable and less smug in your version, but, dammit, I just want Donna and the Doctor to get their happy future together and therefore anything that facilitates is of the good, as far as I'm concerned.

I love Jenny's conversation with CAL, although I'm a bit curious as to why CAL thought giving the Doctor and Donna happiness in their computer reality was too much too soon - I think the Doctor and Donna are sooo ready for it.

And I am absolutely on tenterhooks waiting for the next chapter.....

[tkel_paris]

If you saw her as more likable, then I did my job. I know some are just never going to soften toward her, and I thought I was one of them. Writing fanfiction is interesting therapy at times.

CAL is also a child. I'm positive that she has the imagination to realize, however, what trouble it could be for the people she saved to adjust back to real life. And there's a lot she doesn't have the maturity - or inclination - to know about, and you'll see that soon enough. It's playing God, and CAL clearly wasn't ready to watch the consequences. Especially when you have two people as observant and thoughtful as Donna and the Doctor involved.

Am working to make it worth the wait...

[docdonnaforever]

Well. You never fail to wove evertyhing so perfectly together in this story. This chapter brough tears to my eyes(especially at River's diary entry)and I've never seen this approach to what happened. If only RTD could take a lesson from you, my dear!! He would have had a lot more viewers and people who liked him. But, very good job on this chapter especially!! I've liked them all of course, but by far this is the best.

Sooo will we get to see the Doctor's and Donna's time in their AU? I'm so curious to see as to how things turned out for them! As a sidenote, I'm very happy that there was no Lee in this! Phew!

Keep writing! :D

[tkel_paris]

Well... Thanks... Heh, yeah, if only he'd taken ideas... Then Rose would've been gone forever, perhaps dying a hero's death (for good measure), and Martha would've gotten a fair shake. And probably have been liked by more people... And, of course, more time with Donna! (And no River... Of course, that's just me...)

Next chapter... As soon as Muse and I can come to an agreement on certain details, and my beta gives me the okay. (I'm really uncertain about these last chapters...)

Thanks!