[fanfic] The Greatest Show on Earth (4/?)

[tiptoe39]

Title: The Greatest Show on Earth
Chapter IV: Frozen
Rating: PG-13 for slight sexual innuendo and language.
Summary: AU. Welcome to the circus. The lion tamer meets the new act.
Author's note: Hee, hee, this fic has eaten my brain. I'm going to write it exactly as I please, aimlessly and with lots of fun. Not that this chapter is starting out

Comments

[starlingthefool]

YAYZ
I just read through these a few days ago - don't remember if I commented, but this is a fantastic series. This chapter in particular. Love the dialog between Matt and Ted (and lol fire eater...).

[tiptoe39]

thanks! i really enjoyed that dialog myself. very pleased at how strongly their characters and needs came through. how are you doing m'dear? all well?

[hanuueshe]

...

BEST. THING. EVER!!!!!

Okay, so, before everyone decends upon this like a pack of wolves, let me be the first to say "I LOVE TED!!!" and "Your dialog rocks!" because it totally, totally does. I cannot wait for you to continue this. I really can't. :D

[tiptoe39]

yay! like i said above, i really enjoyed writing the dialog for this. welladjusted!Ted cracks me up!

[kethni]

I love this series! I love your use of language and even more Matt's little support network of Ted, Peter, and Nathan :)

Great stuff.

[tiptoe39]

It's weird to write everyone so mentally healthy, isn't it? hee.

[lea1santome]

It's the full moon.
"Ted, what happens if I'm gay?. You're gay, my friend, and has a case-Ted.
Es la luna llena.
"Ted, ¿que pasa si soy gay?. Eres gay, amigo mio, y has caso a Ted-.

[tiptoe39]

You liked that line? Hee hee. Ted is too busy breathing fire to worry about Matt's sexual preferences, I think.

[lea1santome]

Just to get hurt a bit I will say that I did not like it anywhere.

Has chopped!

I liked everything, especially when Ted advises Matt.

Sólo para hacerte enfadar un poco voy a decir que no me gustó ninguna parte.

¡has picado!

Me ha gustado todo, sobre todo cuando Ted le aconseja a Matt.

[tiptoe39]

hah! i will go cry now!

(just kidding)

I have been meaning to tell you this for a while, and I hope it's OK to say: Sometimes I have trouble understanding the translations you use.

(What do you mean "chopped"? Is "chopped" like "joking"?)

One thing you can do if you want to make your English translations better is, always use the pronoun. A lot of the time, when in spanish you don't need to say who you're talking about, in English you always need to say who is doing something. So always use "el" or "ella" or "yo" (et cetera) if you can, when you use the translator. (and use it before the verb if you can.) It still isn't perfect, but maybe it will be a little easier to read.

I hope that is OK advice. I love your comments so I want to understand them all!

[emmyhildy]

I love Ted!! He's so mean and grumpy and funny and helpful ;)

"What if I'm gay?" silly naive Matt :D So cute!!

[tiptoe39]

hee hee, i wonder what he was expecting to hear? :D