[fanfic] Legacies: Part 2 (PG-13)

[tiptoe39]

Title: Legacies
Chapter: 2
Author: tiptoe39
Characters/Pairings: Matt/Mohinder; Maya; Elle
Rating: The fic as a whole is rated R; this chapter is rated PG-13 for language.
Warnings: Spoilers for all of Season 2 so far; slash. (The slash is integral to the plot, but it is not the plot itself.)
Summary: We are given legacies by those who leave us, but also

Comments

[boudecia7]

I love the way you integrated the bit from "Tentatively" in here--the slow buildup from the previous part works beautifully. I also really like the dialogue between Matt and Mohinder, Mohinder and Elle, etc...it's all great. Honestly, I think you could write about paint drying and it would still be fun to read. :) You do great work! Looking forward to the next part...

[tiptoe39]

yes, basically tentatively was the prototype and this is the working model... so you'll see the other parts in here before long...

thank you honey for your feedback!

[carmexgirl]

Oh the slowness is agonising! I think the best part about this is the kiss at the end - we're all used to passionate, finalising kisses, where there is a release of tension and a final admittance. This was just what was - a kiss between two people who are completely unsure of what's going on, unsure of what's going to happen next. I love the way that I'm not sure if it means the beginning of something or the end. Excellent!

[tiptoe39]

yes, i wanted to do it a little more realistically this time... and i love the waff, don't get me wrong but.......... well, this is a nice change of pace.

[imeru]

I loved how you pictured two characters you never worked with like Maya and Elle, this shows how really good you are at writing!
Looking forward to have 3d chapter. I mean, THE KISS!, I was so much waiting for it. *_*

[tiptoe39]

thanks honey! writing maya is hard, but writing elle is easy, she sits on my shoulder and bitches at me.

[baehj2915]

I yay and cheer in your general direction, m'dear! I wish you'd stop being so talented. I mean, canon? You had to go an pay attention to that?

For srs though. Good job. It was really well written. I'm eagerly awaiting the next part.

:D :D :D

[tiptoe39]

:-D you bring the happies in a way i can't begin to describe. :glomps you:

[baehj2915]

awww *makes hearts and happy faces*

I love it when we have our little mutual love fest and I love you and you love me and everything is just peachy keen!

*dance tiem*

JLB

[rogueslayer452]

Another great chapter. Just the fact that their relationship is progressing is good enough for me.

I like the subtle changes too, like with Maya and Matt's jealousy, with Mohinder and Matt actually forming a friendship which could lead to something more. That ending bit was nicely written. They know how they feel and how the other feels, but it is never really said directly and just from their dialogue alone I can see happening between two guys who feel a mutual attraction to each other. The whole "it shouldn't be happening but it is" and "what should we do?" right down to the kiss. I can't wait to see how all this evolves from that.

Oh, and I liked the other stuff that was happening in the chapter, too. I feel bad for Maya, she literally has no one else to turn to or to trust except for Mohinder who saved her life. Can't wait for more. :)

[tiptoe39]

Thanks. so much. :D