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Brigit's Flame -- "Strike"

Jul 26, 2009 08:37

Prompt: "strike"
Wordcount: 1,020
Warnings: ...masturbation, oh my; brief language
Author's Note: This was really tough to write. Interpret that statement as you like. (I'm probably going to look at this later and be like, "AAAAHH!!!")

( The first strike is the media's. )

[year] 2009, [rating] r, [original] brigit's flame, [length] 1k

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tierfal July 27 2009, 19:26:25 UTC

You make perfect sense to me. ♥

innana88 July 27 2009, 20:37:30 UTC

::applauds::

Fanfreakintastic.

It was sensual and hot, yes, but it was also tender and painful at the same time, which is quite a feat. Wonderful writing AGAIN. I do love reading your stuff. I hope that in the near future I have more time to be able to read and comment than I have had the last few months.

The only change I would make is to cut the last line. You made that clear without having to say it directly. Stating it overtly takes away some of the punch of the piece.

tierfal July 28 2009, 00:59:33 UTC

Thank you! :) I'm really glad it came off as balanced, especially; this one is important to me, but I wasn't entirely sure how I felt about it.

Hmm, that's an interesting way of looking at it. I originally had that at the beginning, but I decided I liked it better as a sort of tie-up, and I sort of wanted it to be an open-ended pun -- out of the closet, out of luck, out of chances, fill in the blank. :)

cedarwolfsinger July 27 2009, 22:03:47 UTC

Good work. How touching and real as a journey of discovery... Good luck!

tierfal July 28 2009, 01:00:08 UTC

Thank you! :)

greenwillow27 July 28 2009, 21:44:51 UTC

Oh, very nice. Sensitive portrayal of your character's self-discovery and a creative take on the prompt!

tierfal July 29 2009, 21:12:20 UTC

Thank you! :) I'm glad you enjoyed it. ^^