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Original -- Once Upon a Time

Jan 10, 2011 21:10

Title: Once Upon a Time
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 850
Warnings: some blood and gore; tone
Prompt: "funny" at pulped_fictions
Summary: Another city is in flames, and a phoenix is about to fade.
Author's Note: I'm on a post-Apocalypse bender. I blame My Chemical Romance, Muse, and eltea. XD …and maybe my weapon kink.

( 'You have to admit it's kind of hilarious.' 'You're sick.' )

[year] 2011, [rating] pg-13, [special] more in the comments, [length] 1k, [original] assorted, [genre] drama

Comments 11

eltea January 11 2011, 08:00:01 UTC

An hour later, when she vaults over a wall and joins him, he stares.

“What are you doing here? You were dying!"

“Yeah,” she says, “but I had a fairy in a bottle.”

-is the only way I accept to believe this ends.

richelle2972 January 12 2011, 00:30:51 UTC

I concur.

tierfal January 12 2011, 01:48:07 UTC

See below, har har har. XD eltea's word is law.

richelle2972 January 12 2011, 18:22:32 UTC

AWESOME. Chrys is such a BADASS! :D

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jobey_in_error January 11 2011, 16:20:59 UTC

DAMN I LOVE THIS.

That whole exchange was perfect, and the flashbacks had me so invested in Chrys... and their mysterious cause.

“No,” Chrys says, “I’m dying. I’ll thank you to make that important distinction.”

She's kind of awesome. This is a Disney death, right? :(

tierfal January 12 2011, 01:50:15 UTC

Thank you! :3

Chrys really kind of exploded without my permission, which I'm sure she would approve of mightily. I'm considering expanding this immensely into my Mince Spies piece, at which point I'll have to make things up a lot more clearly. XD

eltea talked me into making it better above. :'D I am totally BFF-whipped

I'm so glad you liked it, and thanks for reading! :)

alias_amy January 13 2011, 04:32:07 UTC

I'm kind of stunned to read that these are new characters -- they feel so lived in and realized! OMG, how can you not love Chrys? I love this idea that he had a crush on her before, when she was this television personality, and how she's become so vital and intertwined with him through this war. You've put me right in the middle of this battlescene and I NEED MORE!

hellboy January 16 2011, 22:44:30 UTC

This is my absolutely favourite sort of thing to read, and I want MORE NOW PLEASE. Amazing amazing amazing, seriously!

etiam_quietus January 17 2011, 20:53:23 UTC

This was amazing!!! You have to write more about these two people and this world - I'm on the edge of my seat!

Love this line:
They scatter like marbles - Brenden remembers marbles - and hunker down as the dust whips with a vengeance until the vehicle settles like a mosquito, as close to the house as it safely can, the struts creaking audibly as the whirring slows.

and notice that yes, I'm assuming the addendum is just the part of the story you ALWAYS INTENDED BUT JUST FORGOT TO INCLUDE THE FIRST TIME. right????