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[tiddarifka]

I finally finished it

Comments

[alstarryn]

Wow, I've never pictured Kakashi that way.../ever/.

It's an interesting view, I must say.

I like the tiny little bit about Iruka at the end, and omfg the Gai part made me giggle so hard I had to stop and breathe.

[tiddarifka]

thankyou.

[telosphilos]

This does read cleaner than the last version. Kurenai is mispelt, but nothing else jumps out at me.

I do want to see this continued. Perhaps a POV shift would make it easier to continue? I wonder whether Sakura knows and if she does what she'd think of it? I can see her just thinking that the knowledge explains a bit about her sensei's relationships.

Iruka, I can see him being startled and a bit boggled by the idea. I can't see him being anything other than compassionate about it, though I can see him doing some gentle teasing.

Oh, heck, just let us know when your muses cooperate enough to continue this. ;)

[dark_kaomi]

Hm, yes this version is a little smoother than the original. Though at the end you spelled vagina virginia. Woo, he has a state between his legs!

[tiddarifka]

damn spell check!!!

[aramiahatake]

Good story. Are you going to make a part 2? I think Iruka will understand. Even more since Iruka can't get married due to those gosh darn contracts. Thanks for the story. Poor Kakashi.