Swimslash, Gravity's Bringing Us Down 2/3

[thorne_scratch]

Oh my God, I fucking suck, this was supposed to be done over a year ago. To be posted in three parts.

Comments

[fallen_chan]

There's going to be a part 3, right? I think between the first two parts, I've burst into laughter more times than I have in the last week.

the dialogue is just pure ♥ and I absolutely love that the women planned something too. and that Michael is confusing Pieter for Robert for Pieter (does this mean that Lenny confused the two too or did Michael just pick the wrong fountain?) Can't wait to see part 3~

[thorne_scratch]

There is! I just have to, uh, fill in some of the gaps. I massively changed the original ending. I'm really glad you like the dialogue; that's always my favorite part to write. Thank you!

does this mean that Lenny confused the two too or did Michael just pick the wrong fountain?

All to be revealed in part 3!

[fallen_chan]

=D it was great I absolutely loved it! Your dialogue is really engaging.

[fallen_chan]

P.S anonymous is me :)

[athenejen]

I am pretty much in love with this. Even though I had to look up several of them for visual reference, as I hadn't gotten around to keeping track of any swimmers besides Phelps & Lochte (and them only b/c of hackthis, anyway). I am so looking forward to part 3! (But no pressure! It can be so hard to find time and energy to write.)

[thorne_scratch]

Thank you, I'm glad! I figured only, like, five people were reading this anyway. And yeah, with swimming, I'm still all about the 2004 athletes, even though I have nothing against the 2008 guys.

I am determined to have part 3 up sometime in July! I feel super-bad for the delay; it's just that I decided to change the ending, thus needing to write twenty-odd pages of it...

hackthis is the world's best dealer.

[athenejen]

See, I don't think anyone's going to be upset about waiting a little longer for it to be something you're happy with. I actually think your dedication to thorough revision is pretty impressive. :)

So, so true.

[thorne_scratch]

Part 3 IS ACTUALLY, LIKE, ALMOST DONE. I ONLY NEEDED AN EXTRA OLYMPICS TO FINISH IT! ...I suck, man.

[the_curlyone]

Heh, this is amazing, I Lol'ed so many times. I'm guessing you might not get around to finishing this *shrug* it happens but I thought I'd leave a comment anyway just to say how great this is. You're ability to write dialogue is incredible :)

(BTW Loved Scaly Dicks too! That is some superior crack you're serving there)

[thorne_scratch]

Thanks! Nah, I actually have the third part nearly done. It just turned out so long, I may have to split it into four parts. The Olympics was a good excuse to actually sit up and finish it. I wouldn't have stuck it on AO3 if I didn't intend to put the whole thing up :)

Scaly Dicks will resume as well-- again, I tend to write, put it aside to edit, forget I finished it, and then remember, uh, years later. I suck. But thanks, glad you like the crack!

[the_curlyone]

Yay! That's great to hear *subscribes to you on Ao3* The Olympics are my excuse for reading swimming RPS again :)