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thornblossom

Ruse - Avatar: TLA

Oct 10, 2009 12:28

Title: Ruse
Fandom: Avatar: The Last Airbender
Rating: K
Word Count: 1,814
Genre: Family, hurt/comfort
Characters: Azula, Zuko
Warnings: None.

Summary: The newly-crowned Fire Lord pays his sister a visit.

( Oh, I know! You want me to become a good girl so you and I can have that sweet, darling brother-sister relationship we never had! )

fanfic, avatar: the last airbender

Comments 20

yukinoomoni October 11 2009, 15:44:13 UTC

Wow, that was good. Very wonderful. I could hear their voices, it was so well-written.

Excellent job.

thornblossom October 11 2009, 16:40:37 UTC

Thank you so much. ♥ I always try to make sure I can hear the characters' voices in my head so it's wonderful to hear when they "speak" to readers in the same way they spoke to me. :3

yukinoomoni October 11 2009, 16:57:18 UTC

You nailed it. Totally. Do you have any other stories?

thornblossom October 11 2009, 17:05:53 UTC

This is my first fic in the Avatar verse. More coming, time permitting. :)

alakenos October 11 2009, 16:03:37 UTC

Awww that was so sweet. I LOVE your Zuko, seriously. Love him. And Azula is so well characterized.

That was wonderful.

thornblossom October 11 2009, 16:47:04 UTC

Thank you. :3 I'm glad you liked my take on them.

amanuensis1 October 11 2009, 17:08:04 UTC

YES. I imagine their encounter going just like this. This is great.

thornblossom October 11 2009, 18:24:14 UTC

Thank you. :D

aztec October 11 2009, 17:10:22 UTC

WAIIIIII~ that was so wonderful! Your writing style is very dynamic. It's got a real rhythm to it and makes Azula's fury seem real, not just words on a page.

thornblossom October 11 2009, 18:27:57 UTC

Thank yooou. ♥ I did have to do a lot of tweaking to make Azula's spiels not seem flat, I'm glad it seems to have worked. xD

neldluva October 11 2009, 17:35:18 UTC

I am absolutely in love with this ficlet. It's so perfect ... you captured Azula's crazy voice and thoughts right on target. I like that she had never let Zuko be her big brother. That seems very appropriate. And call me a sucker for dark endings, but I like the sense that she probably won't be fixed. Great work, I really enjoyed reading it!

thornblossom October 11 2009, 21:12:22 UTC

Thanks! Zuko seemed to me like such a sweet kid, I could imagine him trying to act big-brotherly towards her at some point, but Azula was such a bratty little sister that it probably didn't last for long.

I'm glad you thought the ending was appropriate. By the end of Book 3, it looked to me like Azula had a serious mental disorder, and since psychology is a fairly modern science I just can't see her being "fixed". (At least, not without a lot of work... way more work than 1,800 words can describe, anyways. xP)