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[____ero__sennin]

Title: Pain
Fandom: Naruto
Couple: Naruuga - Neji/Naruto/Hinata
Challenge: #28 - Get Out
Rating: R for violence and strong language. Oh, and angst. Loads of angst.
Summary: The Hyuuga clan goes to hell in a big way.

Comments

[lexkixass]

*squees*

Dude. Very awesome. And very like Hiashi to only to talk to Neji but not Hinata when they left.

And you explain the pain of the seal so very well. Kudos.

[____ero__sennin]

Feedback makes the Ero-Sennin happy ^^.

Glad it didn't seem too terribly contrived or anything. And the seal was definately the most fun part. Because me=sadistic.

[lexkixass]

^-^

Yanno... Your sadism plus mine will make for a very fun Kurenai-Kabuto meeting, whenever we get around to it. :D

[____ero__sennin]

Kurenai won't know what hit her.

Kabu: *sneakyninjagrope!*
Kurenai: O/////O *smack!*
Kabu: *twitchtwitch* Worth...it...

[icedark_elf]

*gibbers incoherently for a few moments*

Wow. That fight, and Naruto jumping in and demanding his lovers. And Neji taking his stand. And the request from Hiashi at the very end.

Just wow.

[____ero__sennin]

Well, Naruto said it himself; he's bad at giving up. Which means, of course, he's not gonna hand his special people over easily.

[sparklemagpie]

Oh man, as much as I hate to see Hiashi get branded as 'typical asshole father type', you did it well! I heart you much and I love how totally brash Naruto is about this. I can just see it sinking in later for Neji that Naruto actually offered to leave the villiage he's wanted to lead all his life, the nation he's called home since he was a baby, to be with his lovers and protect them. That's a weighty prospect indeed.

*geeks out*

[____ero__sennin]

That last line from Hiashi was kind of my attempt to show that he does, indeed, care a little about his family. Glad I didn't make him appear too 2-D.

And I don't think even Naruto had really thought through exactly what he was saying just then, but I he really did mean it. He's completely and utterly brash, but he's also determined, honest, and loving. It's what makes him such an interesting character to work with.

Thanks~

[sparklemagpie]

Oh yeah, Naruto is brash as heck, but what I love about writing with him (and about how you write him) is that what he says he means - even in the heat of the moment. Neji will see a heavy significance to that that Naruto will only see as keeping his word. His willingness to sacrifice for others - to make those that he loves happy - is for all intents and purposes, practically subconcious.

[yurathewicked]

*me loves*

great job. i really liked the seal-burning part- it was some excellent writing if i do say so myself (and i do).

and i like how naruto scared hiashi... *evil grin* way to go naruto!!

[sparklemagpie]

That anonymous reply was me. Explorer ate my login... again O_E