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[thinksinpink]

I was just suddenly hit with the feeling that--after my year and a half with the real N--everything I've been doing so far with cried_babel has been (and will be) manufactured crap. He himself is happy and alive, sure that's great, but everything else feels fake. I know this is where people are going to tell me this is my opportunity to really develop their

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[vegawriters]

So don't make the story about a relationship. She's a non-factor in his life. You've established that. He's been gone for 8 months. And he's happy to stay gone. It's okay if she's still in love with him, but it's okay for him to NOT be in a relationship. To just be on a journey of self-discovery.

And maybe, you can then write the parallel - her story. One that involves her own sense of discovery and growth.

It doesn't have to be a love story.

[thinksinpink]

Part of the problem is for the last couple days, he's been thinking about going back home for easter to see her and his kids. And I know one doesn't go anywhere without the other. Well, obviously they do, but they're talking every day or every other day. They're a pair.

[vegawriters]

I don't think they are, honestly. Everything you have written over the last couple of years is them moving away from each other. Even when they're together, he's roaming. I think she thinks they are a pair because it's easy, but I think he doesn't think that way. Not in how you've written it.

If you're going to keep going with the reboot, rip the bandage off and get to the root of the bullshit. Because he was roaming before Mexico happened. He was never settled with her. And you've started this reboot with him away for eight whole months. He's made a life for himself in South America and it doesn't sound like he wants to go home. When he posts, he's not talking about going home. He's happy when he's talking about South America.

So rip the bandaid off. If they are a pair, they're a pair. But fucking write them as one. Because you never have. And sometimes, people stop being pairs. Grissom and Sara stopped being a pair. And it hurts, and it sucks, but 99% of the time, it's better for the story because the characters are telling you

[thinksinpink]

You know, I think you've hit the nail on the head. He's leading me in this direction I'm afraid to go in. Sure, he wants to go see his family for a while, but when he does, he has no intention of staying. I think I'm so used to telling HIS story from the side of everyone else, it's weird to let him lead me for a change.

I think the root is he's having a midlife crisis.

But how do I know or gauge the success of this reboot? Is it based on not having crushed his soul?