prompt 41: between a gasp and a whisper

Jan 14, 2008 02:50


Title: between a gasp and a whisper
Pairing: Nathan/Peter
Rating: NC-17
Prompt: Day 41 "whisper"
Words: 499
between a gasp and a whisper )

author: oh_mcgee, day 41

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versinae January 14 2008, 16:17:15 UTC
Oh wow. That was a great turnaround in the last paragraph, with Peter's motivations becoming clear. He really manipulates Nathan masterfully, making this be not just a kink vignette, but a kink vignette with character development. I love it when authors sneak character development into sex scenes, that always wins.

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oh_mcgee January 14 2008, 21:02:58 UTC
Well, I'm pretty much incapable of writing these two without any angst at all. Lol. Thanks for commenting. :D

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ex_rosegany January 14 2008, 19:40:13 UTC
I probably shouldn't read these kind of things in the library ;)

Any kind of kink seems to work for these too, but you really did this well - the descriptions are so lush and sensual and powerful, I feel sort of twisted up and out and tense and buzzing, and the last paragraph really did me in. Oh, Peter. So very like him, and so sad that he feels he has to resort to this - and probably has to - and yet so beautiful that at least Nathan can genuinely give him this, Peter that vulnerable and Nathan so close to him in this that his barriers kind of have to break down for Peter.

Beautiful. Beautiful, hot, and kind of heartbreaking, but mostly beautiful.

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oh_mcgee January 14 2008, 21:38:54 UTC
Libray pr0n ftw! :D I'm glad you liked it - I wrote it for the porn battle, hence the shortness. I'm going to have to write something longer in the future.

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alwaysenduphere January 14 2008, 20:32:58 UTC
Guh.
That's all.

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oh_mcgee January 14 2008, 21:41:18 UTC
:D

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avaserenity January 14 2008, 20:59:04 UTC
ohh Peter you sneaky, kinky devil.

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oh_mcgee January 14 2008, 21:48:32 UTC
Indeed he is! thanks for commenting!

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