LJ Idol Season 9, Week 12: Barrel of Monkeys

[theun4givables]

The girl picks up the barrel, her squat, short fingers seeming almost unable to wrap around the plastic. Slowly, she turns it over, watching the monkeys scatter all over the table, her brows knitted together in concentration.

Comments

[kagomeshuko]

This is really good!

[theun4givables]

Thank you.

[roina_arwen]

Well written. I liked the imagery of the game interspersed with the real life events, and how fragile that chain of monkeys is. *Hugs*

[theun4givables]

Thank you. :)

It was that stupid imagery that inspired the piece to begin with. *shakes fist at imagery* ;)

*hugs back*

[halfshellvenus]

That was what came to me, as well. I think the piece would have been complete without the monkeys, but they paralleled the concept of things hanging by a thread and trying so long and so carefully to build the chain and keep it intact, when the ultimate result will still be tenuous and hard as ever.

The most important part is finally seeing that. The chain is not forged of iron, never was. :(

[theun4givables]

Yeah. I think I could have gone without the imagery, either, but I liked having the two parts so clearly interlinked too much to drop them.

This is what happens when Gary gives me topics I'm immediately inspired by. ;)

[adoptedwriter]

Almost poetic and very powerful. AW

[theun4givables]

Thank you. :)

[grail76]

Very good.

[theun4givables]

Thank you. :)

[itsjustc]

Very good and very powerful x

[theun4givables]

Thank you. :)