Fic: A Dirty Great Monster

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Title: A Dirty Great Monster
Author: definehome 
Recipient: thefannishwaldo
Pairing: Jack/Ianto, Gwen/Rhys (implication)
Summary: There’s a dirty great monster, in this house; We pretend it’s not there
Rating: R (sex and some violence)
Disclaimer: I don’t own any of the pretty boys.
Warnings: none really
Word Count: approx 5000
Betas: Anonymous

Comments

[metztlimoon]

Loved the atmosphere in this- humour and tenseness. And I was intrigued from the very start. Great!

[definehome]

I'm glad. I tried really hard to make each section interesting, so that even the exposition pulled you along.

[thisbedear]

Spooky and dark with a magic kiss at the end.

Just like a Grimm Brothers' tale.

Excellent!

Thanks!

ThD

[definehome]

Not quite like Grimm Brothers' tale. This ending is nominally happy, I'm not quite as gruesome as those stories, but I appreciate the comparison!

[dragenphly]

This was great! I started off just sort of half-reading it, but by the second paragraph I found myself reading really really slowly, so I could catch every word and work out what was going on. I love the way it starts off quite harmless but you just...feel the darkness settling. Really well done! This was a brilliant read.

[definehome]

grin That was exactly what I was going for - each detail important, and compelling.

Did you get that Tosh knew exactly what the ferret was, right from the start? (I tried to imply that, but I'm not sure if it got across) She was just too insecure to say anything, and then became too suspicious of the people around her to do anything.

[ex_rosered75]

Your description and imaginary are beautiful and chilling. There's so much to like about this story; from the spooky fairy tale feel, to the ethereal feel of the dream sequences and how you build-up the reveal of what's actually going on. I have many favourite lines but one in particular stood out: There is a man in a dark greatcoat standing in a puddle of moonlight. His teeth glint sharply, and in his eyes Ianto can see both life and death dancing uneasily.

Just gorgeous!

This is such a clever and unique fic, and a perfect read on a dreary afternoon.

*re-posted for typos.

[definehome]

I totally suffer from typos too. I've corrected some of the formatting errors (and apostrophe errors) on my own LJ.

I love hearing about favorite lines -- I like knowing what works (or what goes over the top) So thanks for that!

[artistwife]

Wow! What a story. Creepy, Creepy. I couldn't stop reading it was giving me goosebumps. The dream sequences were great. Scary, trying to figure out what is happening.

[definehome]

I do like writing mystery, but this was my first stab and 'horror'. I'm glad you got the creeps - definitely my goal in life - or at least this story.