Fic: Bats and Eyeshadow

Sep 16, 2010 20:41

Title: Bats and Eyeshadow
Series: Vampire Row
Characters: Jasper, Rich
Genre: Paranormal/urban fantasy, humour, gay fiction
Status: Complete
Rating: PG
Content: It's a spoiler, so please highlight to read: Mocking shot at the extreme stereotype of the emo subculture; sarcastic reference to suicide/wrist-slitting. Also, vampires.
Length: 1, 521 ( Read more... )

fiction, genre: urban fantasy, genre: gen, genre: gay fiction, status: complete, genre: humour, series: vampire row, pairing: jasper and rich

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2metaldog September 16 2010, 12:23:07 UTC
*snickers* This has definite promise. I'd say I was sorry for you getting bitten (literally) by this idea, but I'd be lying. I'm amused at the way these two interact and the duck laugh... just priceless.

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theskimblishone September 18 2010, 12:32:16 UTC
*shoos off muses chewing on brain*

I can't complain either, since I had a grand old time writing this. Their stuff seems to roll out pretty easily now. (In the original story, Rich was just the roommate who disrupted Jasper and his boyfriend. Then I wondered why the more interesting guy was just a secondary character while I was wondering about the sex scene, and bang. It works!)

I've heard people laugh like that. There's some SCARY laughers at my work! :D

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theskimblishone September 18 2010, 12:28:18 UTC
Thanks! And - I think I know what you mean. I like all my characters too, but getting into these guys' skin was really easy, once I rethought my direction. I found them really appealing to write.

It IS the worst reason why you'd ever become a vampire, which is why he says it! Jasper's a bit of a dick that way, really. One day someone's going to take him at his word. *chuckles*

Mmmmm, raw carrot. YUM. I'd so go there, and it's been a while since anyone remembered to make carrot sticks... *makes a note to cut some up tomorrow* (Rich's eyes just bulged right out of his head, though...)

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mee_eep September 16 2010, 13:09:39 UTC
you're awesome, and HAPPY BIRTHDAY :)

I love these guys; nice to see a chubby hero but the extreme messyness is making me cringe! *glances around at all her own mess-sigh* I'm wondering what Jimpa is though?

There's veggies in noodle pots LOL

Can't wait to read more. *debates googling other unusal bite facts to casually mention ;)*

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mee_eep September 16 2010, 20:42:26 UTC
um why am I wishing you happy birthday again? LOL I followed on from grimm's post then engaged brain and thought - hey how many birthday's does this person have?

Oh well, have a happy you day ;)

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theskimblishone September 18 2010, 12:19:47 UTC
I will never complain over getting multiple birthday wishes! I mean, this is like having a birthday fortnight now, which is awesome. I wonder how long my birthday can stretch out before I have to call it officially over...? :D

So, thank you! Yay for more me days!

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theskimblishone September 18 2010, 12:24:06 UTC
Thank you! :D

I like making non-traditionally-handsome heroes, so I'm glad that appeals. A smile and a sense of humour makes a gorgeous guy or girl, IMO.

The mess would drive me bat fuck crazy, but I am anal that way, so... (Since I tend more to passsive-aggressive, there'd be notes and grumbling, not bin-throwing...)

Jimpa is Rich's dad too, but you'll find out more about that later on, 'cause it does kind of become a point in the proper story. I just thought it was too 'making a point of this' to have Rich explain it when it wasn't necessary to the conversation.

Tiny ones! You'll need a microscope, but they are there!

*debates googling other unusal bite facts to casually mention ;)*

If I come up with something totally crazy, it's on your head! :P

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frogs_of_war September 16 2010, 21:06:28 UTC
I want to mention Rich's diet, but after reading your other post, I think I better not.

Did you purposefully leave out Jimpa's gender? Or, I guess, did Rich? What's so odd about Jasper that another vampire would stare at him? Does a wrist cuff automatically mean your a cutter? I know several people who wear them for fashion reasons only one of which has ever cut herself (and not on her wrist because then the scars would show).

Sugar ants would have a field day in that room. Even if Rich uses the trash can, he'll still get sugar crystals everywhere.

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theskimblishone September 18 2010, 12:37:53 UTC
*LOLs* Incidentally, I wrote that part of Rich's character a couple of days before my rant. You might not believe me on that, but it's true. :)

No leaving-out on Rich's behalf. Who says something like "My Dad's this, and his partner's that, and oh yeah, his partner happens to be a green dinosaur"? It was a little too much exposition for his character, I thought, especially when Jimpa is as ordinary to Rich as Aunt Cecelia is to Jasper. In fact, even more ordinary, since Jasper at least knows that Aunt Cecelia is strange to most people, and that's my point: I'm refusing to treat Rich's having two fathers as anything that needs to be pointed out. It doesn't. It's a passing reference and that's all it needs to be until it becomes more of an issue later on (and it will), but that's in another discussion between these two ( ... )

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frogs_of_war September 18 2010, 15:42:46 UTC
I guess I didn't get that he was all dolled up. None of your descriptions really said goth to me. My husband owned spiked wrist cuff when I met him and he was punk. My daughter's boyfriend owns some too, and he favors band or movie t-shirts and cargo pants. My daughter buys most of her clothing at a place that could be a goth store, but she never wears them goth. Maybe it's all in the black eye shadow ( ... )

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theskimblishone September 19 2010, 07:04:44 UTC
Might be a regional difference, too. I think there's more blending between the emo/goth/popular subcultures here in Australia, depending on your age group and what's 'in'. And as I said, it was quite subtle - it's very hard to write a detailed appearance from the POV of a narrating character without info dumping. Mentioning cuffs and chain belts and having Rich comment on the lack of eyeshadow was the best I could really do, I think.

My paternal grandfather was always called Tompa - even by strangers, sometimes. Rarely by his proper name, never 'granddad' or 'grandpa'. I thought it applied really well in the situation of having same-gendered parents. (I hate 'Other Dad' and derivations of, I really do...)

Aw, that sounds awesome! No worries, and I'm looking forward to that fic!

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pockypuck February 18 2011, 19:56:11 UTC
I love Rich and Jasper so much. X3 They're adorable. And so normal, in the best way: the unexpected normality makes people stare! <3

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theskimblishone February 20 2011, 05:40:44 UTC
Thanks. :D I really enjoy writing about them!

It's funny, you know. I write stuff that's a little bit off the wall - and yet, it's all normal*, or looking at how non-normal things would behave if they were real. I wonder what this says about the prevelance of 'normal' in fiction?

*Normal, of course, being a largely useless word most of the time, becuase what the hell is normal anyway?

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