Fic: One Half the World (Death Note)

[theredwepainted]

Fandom: Death Note
Rating: Uhhh Hard R? Light NC-17? I suck at ratings.
Spoilers: Everything ever.
Specifics: Light/L (...), Light/Misa (tiny edge of), 3600 words, sort of dark but it's Death Note.
Author's Notes: Playing with format - 11 sections of 100, 200, 300, 400, 500, 600 words and back down to 100.
Summary: Light, L and the inexorable

Comments

[booboosheep]

ffffff

why do you have to make me sad forever.

[theredwepainted]

idk it's my job or something.

forgive me, bb.

[joyinthedance]

This is BEAUTIFUL. Nearly perfect. So emotional, and completely in Light's voice. I love what you did with L's many names. I love what you did with Light's dream; it made everything so realistic. I love how you covered the entire series in such a small space and made every word matter. I love the two death scenes. Well done indeed. *mems this*

[theredwepainted]

Thank you thank you thank you!

(Secretly, I loved writing the death scenes. Augh! Well they're so sad.)

[thelake]

There are crumbs on the corner of Ryuga's mouth for a moment before he notices them. They make Light want to punch him in the face.

loves: *occurs!*

L smells like shampoo and strawberry sauce and coffee;

too good to be true... *dies*

He's imagined it before, just like this, and L is so beautiful when he's still

he was goddammit. it's so cruel.

Somewhere inside the matryoshka dolls is hidden Light Yagami, brilliant student, humble man. Visionary, genius. God.

okaaay.. goosebumps, hello?

Light can almost see it. Listening to N, he thinks, You aren't worthy of his place.

He wonders how much a corpse decomposes in four years.

GOOOSHHH. EXACTLY!

(In his dreams they fuck like they never did in life.

[...]

But really, it's only a dream.

This whole section was exquisite! ♥

(Somewhere, far away, he thinks he hears the clink of chains.)

omg *runs* I'M IN MY OFFICE FOR GOD'S SAKE! I CAN'T CRY?!!...

that was very lovely!

[theredwepainted]

HEY IT'S YOU!! HAHAH!

Thanks!

[luxnigra]

I have no words to describe the sensation that I feel when I have read your story. I can say only one thing: it’s perfect. And it is so sad. The part about L’ s death is the most beautiful, especially when you say -L smells like shampoo and strawberry sauce and coffee; Light wants to inhale it, inhale him - his last hit of a drug he never knew he was addicted to-. - Maybe they could have had a million bruising kisses and he would have heard L say his name forever if the world had been different-: this words have convey to me a sensation of great sadness. The sadness of the things that are lost forever. Wonderful story!!!.

[theredwepainted]

Thank you!

I always think that, in another universe they probably would have got along well, you know?

[tunazap]

This is perfect. I wish I had something else to say, but I have no words to describe how this made me feel. Amazing.

[theredwepainted]

Oh, thank you so much.