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Nov 02, 2009 23:21

travel these faces rose/ten, pg.
we treat memories like loose change, but goodbye is for the stranger habits. for challenge 15 at then_theres_us. 935 words.

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:fated_addiction, challenge 15

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fated_addiction November 8 2009, 02:50:43 UTC

Thank you so much!

momentmusical November 3 2009, 04:59:55 UTC

Oh my goodness, my heart.

I love how you wrote them, on the precipice of his regeneration; it's sad, but at least they're together when he needs her the most. And the way you describe the orchard is both lush and gorgeous. AND THAT KISS, oh my. Wonderful, absolutely wonderful ♥.

But he takes her hand again. “A little further then,” he says.

This is so incandescently perfect. Literally took my breath away.

fated_addiction November 8 2009, 02:50:59 UTC

Thank you!

rowofstars November 3 2009, 05:46:21 UTC

“A little further then,” he says.

*wibble*
The kiss, the way you describe the orchard, is so vivid and beautiful. I love the way you mix in these little bits and pieces of their thoughts without distracting from the rest of the scene.

fated_addiction November 8 2009, 02:51:38 UTC

I'm so glad you enjoyed it!

morrighangw November 3 2009, 06:28:17 UTC

So, so bittersweet and lovely.

fated_addiction November 8 2009, 02:51:51 UTC

Thank you!

marcasite November 3 2009, 13:39:06 UTC

“To see me through then."

She nods. “Until it’s time,” she murmurs, blushing.

Lovely as always, bb! It's coming and I love that you have Rose there, ready for it. ♥

fated_addiction November 8 2009, 02:52:13 UTC

Thank you, bb! ♥