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Jul 22, 2009 22:49

The Heart That You Call Home, Rose/Ten, rating g
This kind of, um, got away from me a bit. I hope it didn't stray too far from the prompt. Also, AU after Doomsday.
The feeling that courses through him upon that sight is utterly indescribable. It feels less like an emotion and more like something alive, something clawing at his insides for freedom., ( Read more... )

:kh_mattie, challenge 05

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k_puff July 23 2009, 03:55:39 UTC

Holy SHIT.

THAT IS SO INCREDIBLY HEART BREAKING. ;___________; Jeezus CHRIST.

starry_eyed July 23 2009, 03:59:10 UTC

OH NO. :(

*pets you*

It'll be ok. It didn't happen that way, THANK GOD. lol. Thanks for reading though!

javabreeze July 23 2009, 04:15:30 UTC

starry_eyed July 23 2009, 18:29:51 UTC

Oh no, your poor gut. Thank you? lol.

No really, I'm glad you liked it. :)

thatlibrarylady July 23 2009, 04:17:23 UTC

You just killed me. Very nicely written.

starry_eyed July 23 2009, 18:30:09 UTC

Thank you!

spoons1899 July 23 2009, 04:22:05 UTC

Oh my god, this is wrenchingly beautiful and just plain wrenching. I actually just went back and checked the word count because I can't believe you did all that in about 500 words. This story felt much longer than that, which is a compliment. I think even just the Rose paragraph could have been a whole fic, and then put together with the Doctor watching her really increases the emotion. I love that you didn't know she's at her wedding until he leaves the church and then the bells toll, and the lovely parallel with the bells and the clocks in Rose's part.

And then the last two lines just are just shattering.

Beautiful job.

starry_eyed July 23 2009, 18:31:40 UTC

Oh my goodness, thank you so much. And thank you for pointing out that you didn't know it was her wedding until that bit, as I was hoping it would be a surprise. I'm really glad you liked it!

spoons1899 July 23 2009, 19:08:26 UTC

You're welcome. Now I'm really looking forward to reading more of your stuff. Though maybe I'll start with something a little cheerier… :)

mylittlepwny July 23 2009, 04:28:26 UTC

MATTIE.

MATTIE.

FOR THE SAKE OF ALL THAT IS GOOD AND RIGHT AND HOLY, I DEMAND A SEQUEL.

MAKE HIM COME BACK. OH MY GOD MAKE HIM COME BACK.
BECAUSE IT'S WHAT HE DOES FOR HER!
COMES BACK!
ALL THE TIME!
TO SAY GOODBYE AND REMIND HER IT TRAVELS IN TIME AND OH, SECOND CHANCES ARE UNHEARD OF WITH THEM BECAUSE HE'LL GIVE HER AS MANY AS IT TAKES AND BB, I'M CRYING AND IT WON'T STOP UNTIL I AM A PRUNE INSTEAD OF A PERSON, WHICH WE WANT TO AVOID, RIGHT, WE WANT TO AVOID THAT BECAUSE IF I AM A PRUNE I CAN'T GO ON LJ ANYMORE AND WE WILL NEVER BE ABLE TO SPEAK AGAIN AND IT'S LIKELY SOME OLD PERSON WILL EAT ME BEFORE I FIND A WIZARD TO TURN ME BACK INTO A PERSON AND I WILL NEVER BE ABLE TO READ YOUR GORGEOUS GORGEOUS WORDS AND TREAT YOU TO A CAPITALIZED COMMENT THAT IS LOUD AND CRASS AND BEGGING FOR A SEQUEL WHEN I SHOULD BE FOCUSING ON TELLING YOU HOW BEAUTIFUL EVERYTHING ABOUT THIS IS IF YOU DON'T COUNT THE UNBEARABLE HEARTBREAK HOLY SHIT.

BUT, I JUST. I CAN'T NOT ASK. I CAN'T. I LOVE YOU. THIS HAS KILLED ME.

starry_eyed July 23 2009, 18:35:21 UTC

Mel. MEL. MEEEEEEELLLLLLLLL. I LOVE YOU TOO DON'T DIE.

OK, LISTEN. SO HERE'S THE DEAL.

When I first had this idea, there was more to it. But I cut it down so it wouldn't go way over the word count and the other parts would have made it way too long. But. BUT. Orginally there was more. So if you really want it, I might do a sequel just for you. Because you're so sweet with the nice words and reviewing all the time and just awesome in general.

So...

I WILL WORK ON IT BB.