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LJ Idol Week 5: Build a Better Mousetrap

Apr 14, 2014 22:23

Maya couldn't stop thinking about Thulani’s nightmare from the night in the abandoned office. The way he’d projected, the darkness, the overwhelming sense of wrongness.The fact he barely sleeps at all anymore. She found herself watching him in their downtime, wondering how he ended up there in the first place ( Read more... )

oc:thulani, fic series: the ends, lj idol, oc: maya

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seratonation April 15 2014, 07:59:01 UTC

yeah! sometimes over thinking things can just lead to a bigger mess.

thanks for reading!!

elledanger April 14 2014, 20:02:59 UTC

This was really nice - a really nice turn on the topic. I actually really enjoyed this one quite a lot. Thank you.

seratonation April 15 2014, 08:01:05 UTC

omg thank you im so glad you enjoyed it! I was thinking of doing something more elaborate and I did a tiny bit of research and decide to go in a different direction.

elledanger April 15 2014, 19:57:31 UTC

That was a great decision, well done you!

kickthehobbit April 15 2014, 00:13:34 UTC

I agree with x_disturbed_x-that last line is excellent and really ties the piece together neatly. Well-done!

seratonation April 15 2014, 08:01:19 UTC

thank you so much!

kajel April 15 2014, 01:39:06 UTC

Oh yes, nicely done. That last line is great.

seratonation April 15 2014, 08:01:40 UTC

thank you!

eska818 April 15 2014, 03:04:06 UTC

I'm very sad to see you in the redemption tribe, I love you writing. (Just thought I'd let you know) This piece is great too!

seratonation April 15 2014, 08:03:16 UTC

I was disappointed when it happened but it's given me more motivation to up my game. thank you so much, you totally made my day :D