Comments | themadwritings: Topic 7: Bupkis

seratonation in themadwritings

Dec 08, 2011 23:10

Staying afloat for the moment
237 words | title from Gotye's Eyes Wide Open

( this is (not) the end of the story )

Comments 24

irishrosedkm December 9 2011, 07:22:40 UTC

I like the simplicity of this. It's very sweet.

seratonation December 10 2011, 09:59:56 UTC

thank you, im glad you liked it :)

whipchick December 9 2011, 11:15:32 UTC

You show the relationship so clearly between these two :)

seratonation December 10 2011, 10:00:22 UTC

thank you! :D

oxymoron67 December 9 2011, 20:16:49 UTC

Very nice. You showed the relationship between the two very well, and his frustration was evident.

seratonation December 10 2011, 10:01:27 UTC

thank you so much!

blythe025 December 9 2011, 23:22:45 UTC

Great dialog. It flows really well and sets the sweet, playful scene.

seratonation December 10 2011, 10:05:13 UTC

:D:D thank you so much!

pixiebelle December 10 2011, 05:15:52 UTC

The dialogue was really well done here. Nice job.

seratonation December 10 2011, 10:05:27 UTC

thank you :D