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[thekremlin]

OK, so this is *very* NSFW, fucked up somewhat, and written through numerous distractions, but I am interested to see how it came out - do please leave feedback, even if it is "you're trying too hard". I am still unsure if it was better ended before the explicit bit, but I did that with the other version and I thought I'd experiment.

The idea is

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[kneeshooter]

I think you are "trying too hard" towards the end. But that might be my allergy to "wicked daggers". I suspect somewhere in Fantasyland TM there are a group of Dwarven Smiths TM that are responsible for 99% of the damn things.

[thekremlin]

I'm going to try to rewrite that bit tomorrow, skipping a lot of the description, and see how it comes out like that.