I am an editor. :) Here are my suggestions in the order that they appear in your paragraph.
Pastime = one word. I see a few sentence fragments, but they appear to be for effect, so leave 'em. Hyphenate "simple-minded." Lowercase "principal" unless you use the guy's name with it. Worldwide = one word. Supervillain = one word. Put a semicolon after "Wisconsin" instead of the comma. Put a period after "world."
To quote the country song: I like it! I love it! I want some more of it!
Thanks, I might try a few more of these, I get ideas for little stories or scenes. But I always doubted my ability, not being "taught" writing and all. So the encouragement is appreciated.
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Pastime = one word.
I see a few sentence fragments, but they appear to be for effect, so leave 'em.
Hyphenate "simple-minded."
Lowercase "principal" unless you use the guy's name with it.
Worldwide = one word.
Supervillain = one word.
Put a semicolon after "Wisconsin" instead of the comma.
Put a period after "world."
To quote the country song: I like it! I love it! I want some more of it!
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