Rough Draft (poem)

[thehippiechick]

Eyes filled with pain
I look and see his heart
As much as he's afraid I'd hurt him
It hurts me to think I could love him
If he gave me another chance
I would hold him close
Wipe away his tears
And hope that my love would mend his heart...

Comments

[coldmountain]

one question: whose eyes are filled with pain? the speaker's, "his" or someone else's...

[thehippiechick]

his... and mine too... depends on how you'd look at it.

[coldmountain]

yes, but i want to know how you want me to look at it...

[thehippiechick]

his eyes mostly