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thedoctorsmeds

An Empty Tank - 1

Oct 05, 2010 16:32

Title: An Empty Tank [1/3]
Author: RaeLouise
Rating: Adult
Pairing: Gerard/OMC, slight suggestion of Gerard/Frank
Disclaimer: I do not own, nor am I affiliated with, any of the real people involved in this story and this is work of fiction in it's entirety. Inspired by the Fabulous Killjoys. OMC's name taken from the car James Dean crashed [and ( Read more... )

fandom: my chemical romance, !chaptered, !fanfiction, !unfinished

Comments 18

littlewitch34 October 5 2010, 16:11:46 UTC

I love the language in this. Your use of the Killjoys lingo? Amazing.

thedoctorsmeds October 5 2010, 16:25:21 UTC

Thank you! I was so worried about the lingo feeling to strained so I'm glad you thought the opposite!

littlewitch34 October 5 2010, 18:37:13 UTC

Nope; I think it's impressive, because I've tried to write in it and... it sounds very silly when I do. Yours sounds awesome.

thedoctorsmeds October 5 2010, 19:41:19 UTC

I'm sure it doesn't! It sounded silly to me too actually, but I think it's just because all the lingo is still so new! Give it another go and be prepared to sound a lil silly, it'll be milkshake, motor baby ;)

anna_unfolding October 5 2010, 21:25:42 UTC

OK. I love this. I didn't rly want to read it b/c HELLO! Gerard/someone other than a Killjoy? No! But then of course I realized the error of my biased ways when you wrote a fic where Gerard is about to fuck some pink haired dude for gas. He did, actually say, in real life and everything, that some of the guys look like they sleep with men for money, right? We didn't make that up? It wasn't all a wonderful dream???

So this. This fic is my new favorite thing. Gerard, a desperate rentboy freedom fighter, and Frank angsty and sad in the back seat. My brain is about to explode. Next part, STAT.

:))))))

thedoctorsmeds October 5 2010, 21:51:32 UTC

This comment totally made me squee!! Thank you! Oh God it got me so excited! Hahaha!

See, I thought about that- I was like, really- I'm just pulling a randomer in out of nowhere, will this put people off? But it was that quote, about the looking like they'd sleep with guys for money [or gas] and then... this boy burst out of nowhere and was all 'oh I have gas for Gee, lemme at him!'.

I'm really excited about you being excited and I can't wait to write more now! I only hope I can fill your high expectations! Oh the pressure!

But really, thank you so much.

anna_unfolding October 6 2010, 05:49:23 UTC

YOU CAN'T FAIL WITH A PREMISE LIKE THIS. But in addition to the premise, your writing captures what's going on for lots of characters at once, and also illuminates the dustverse rly well, so WRITE ON!!!

roketmuffin October 5 2010, 23:07:55 UTC

loveee it your killjoy lingo is spot on and the omc wanting to take a walkk its likee yeaahh we all know whats about to happen and poor frankie looking sad he knows whats going to happen to gee's hot little ass!!! 10 stars for you

thedoctorsmeds October 5 2010, 23:38:31 UTC

Thank you so much!! So glad that you enjoyed this and that it worked for you with the original character! Also glad you think my lingo works as I was unsure! Oh, and another thank you for the stars, the best bit ;)

popheart October 6 2010, 22:52:33 UTC

LOVED it!

The language was so sharp and brilliantly executed. I got shivers when the guy spoke it was just amazing. You set the scene so well. I could picture it all vividly in my head. I can tell this is going to be brilliant. You have an amazing way with words nad lanugage that just... it almost messes with my head. It's like being high actually. It's a completely different level. Different plane. Where everythings fuzzy but so bright an sharp and in your face!

Seriously. I can't praise it enough.

thedoctorsmeds October 6 2010, 23:11:42 UTC

Wow. I'm so sure I'm going to wake up tomorrow and this comment will have been a dream! Such kind words and I'm so amazed, and thankful, that this, which I was so anxious about managed to evoke those feelings in you. This 'verse has really drawn me in and I'm so glad that I can, in turn, draw people into my tiny part of it! Again, I hope the next parts are good enough and thank you, truly. You are lovely.

shatterface October 9 2010, 05:13:02 UTC

The most addictive story I've read in a long time, I didn't want to stop!
I really love the language and they way you describe things like "the scorching saline beading on his lashes" etc.
Beautiful work darling, cant wait to read more of it!
<3 Ivy

thedoctorsmeds October 9 2010, 10:38:53 UTC

Thank you princess!
Ily <3