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[thedeadparrot]

Pick a paragraph (or any passage less than 500 words) from any story I've written, and comment to this post with that selection. I will then give you a DVD commentary on that snippet: what I was thinking when I wrote it, why I wrote it in the first place, what's going on in the character's heads, why I chose certain words, what this moment means in

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[roga]

Away We Go is adoooorable! I liked it more than Juno

Part I

[thedeadparrot]

1.

I would just like to say that you are A HORRIBLE PERSON for making me re-live this. *grumble grumble*

Paul McCartney fell flat on his face. He was mostly too drunk to notice, but the pain still registered in his brain. Part of his brain found this hysterical. Here he was, one of the clean cut Beatles (compared to the Stones anyway) pissed out of his mind on his twenty-first birthday. He started giggling uncontrollably.I wrote this as part of a "flash forward" challenge for a challenge comm. In fact, a time-limit challenge comm. Which I will now use to excuse the crappiness I wrote it way under the time limit, mostly because I couldn't pace it correctly

Part II

[thedeadparrot]

2.

Man, this fic was totally the most popular thing I had ever written when it got posted, and the response still sort of blows my socks off to this day. I look at the list of writers who said nice things to me, and I am impressed. Anyway, on to the commentary!

As he wakes up, he thinks he hears the sound of wings.

This line is a repeat of the last line in the section before it. (As he passes out, he thinks he hears the sound of wings.) And the entire fic has these repeated lines scattered throughout (there's one in every section).

The short explanation for why I did this is that I really wanted to use that first line (When Dick Grayson sees Wayne Manor for the first time, he thinks that it looks like it could eat him.) both at the start of the fic and also a few sections in so I decided to do that sort of repetition everywhere to make it stick out less

[hannahrorlove]

From "Not All Those Who Wander":

Those were the regulars of the Thursday night poker games, though they did have a fifth for this week. They frequently had fifths go in and out. The captain showed up when he could be bothered. Chekov was banned after he started winning all the time. Uhura hated poker. Commander Spock was quite crap at the game and stopped coming. He tended to find the whole psychological aspect of poker quite tedious, and even though he could probably hide whatever the hell he wanted from the other players, he would simply tell people what his cards were when asked

[thedeadparrot]

GOD, I STILL LOVE THIS FIC SO MUCH. Which sounds sort of narcissistic, it's true, but at the same time, it's the fic I wish someone else could have written except it's explicitly tailored for my tastes. Because, uh, I wrote it.

This section does give me warm fuzzies, because it probably is the best view of the reboot!Enterprise we get in this fic. (Let's not kid ourselves about Kirk's letters, shall we?) Scotty, I think, is the kind of guy who everyone overlooks and so manages to see everything.

Those were the regulars of the Thursday night poker games, though they did have a fifth for this week. They frequently had fifths go in and out. The captain showed up when he could be bothered. Chekov was banned after he started winning all the time. Uhura hated poker. Commander Spock was quite crap at the game and stopped coming. He tended to find the whole psychological aspect of poker quite tedious, and even though he could probably hide whatever the hell he wanted from the other players, he would simply tell people what his cards were

[hannahrorlove]

The whole fic makes me grin without stopping the whole way through. No guff. And that is a fantastic zinger from Spock, oh yes. Spock Prime is plain made of awesome.

Do me! Do me!

[thedeadparrot]

Man, I'd love to hear you talk about remixing, so here, from The Anatomy of Sound:

“Yes.” Wilson’s range of cadences for the simplest answers never failed to astound House when he was in a mood to be astounded, but now it was just annoying when he just wanted to get this conversation over with right now. The intensity of the sound was the disruptive part to it right now; it busted up the waveform flow of the previously soothing monologue about Lalor’s troubles. Go ahead, blame the different pace and setting of her new job for the difficulties adjusting because, even though she was enjoying herself outside of work, things were bleeding over and making her sloppy. And of course trust Wilson to first step in and do what he could to make her more comfortable with everything from coffee to dinner and a show, and then to try to defend himself to House about it. On one level, he could appreciate the effort Wilson took to conducting everything and ensuring everyone in his department was in harmony with itself and the rest of the hospital.

[bironic]

I just saw Juno yesterday too. Put Ghost World on your list if you haven't already seen it. Juno reminded me of Enid, the other precocious/snarky black-haired girl, only Ghost World did a lot of things better.

Ha, and I was so intent on not forgetting to say that that I forgot to put in a passage! From "Things To Do Before You Die":

The Cranky Bastard: A Novel
by James E. Wilson

There once was a cranky bastard named House. He was mean and everyone hated him. One day, he overdosed on Vicodin and died. :( It was only a little sad.

THE END

Wilson wishes he was there to see House's expression when he read it, and at the very least, Chase said that it had been priceless.

[roga]

Hahahahahaha, I love that quote so much :D Just saying.

[thedeadparrot]

I have seen Ghost World! And I even read the comic! Enid is kind of painful for me to watch, mostly because she is obviously using her snark as a means for hurting other people and herself. And that reminds me a bit too much of myself.

And, ha about the passage! Okay, I don't really remember how the idea for this particular section came about exactly, but I think I was looking for other people's lists of "things to do before you die" and "Write a novel" was one of the ones that stuck out for me.

I thought, "hmmm, what can I do with that?" and this came about.

The Cranky Bastard: A Novel
by James E. WilsonI think I completely ripped this sort of thing from someone else, but I have no idea who. But yes, the formal, almost elaborate headers for this novel are important! Very important! Like the "THE END" at the end of this gripping masterpiece

[bironic]

I still find the whole thing hilarious and read your comments with a grin.