Jealous of a Spoon
It's my first time trying to write Yaoi. My friend asked for a SungHo ( Yunho + Sungmin), so I tried. Please, don't care if it's not overly happy comment, but just some useful critics is very very welcome.
Hope of course that you will enjoy, even though it's probably a sad sight of writing I try my best ^^
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1. Thanks for joining the comm my friend and I started! Please do read my fic as well, and spam me with comments! :D
2. I like how you focus on the spoon, how you express your jealousy of the spoon.
3. I did get confused at the dialogue for a while, when Yunho was confessing to Sungmin, like I was wondering if it was Sungmin confessing or Yunho confessing (correct me if I'm wrong?).
4. But overall, I like it :D
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