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[sufferingfool]

Title: Pain of Salvation

Comments

[cathedral_junki]

niiiiiice! Does "no plot yet" mean there will be more? *looks hopeful* You write them very well, and you paint the picture nicely. i only have one teeny complaint i don't think i could ever hear midnighter say "Going to spill my seed soon..."
"i'm going to cum," yes, "spill my seed" not so much, but that's just me. Really, the emotion is *wonderful* and i like the set up. Oh and there is *never* anything wrong with "just sex" with these two. Looking forward to more.

[sufferingfool]

LOL! The 'seed' bit is a challenge I have with a friend of mine who isn't on Livejournal. It's the sort of weird word we try and put in! LOL I might change it though, because I agree...the wording is a bit too delicate for Midnighter ;)

Glad you like it though!

[loqia]

Mmm.

Sex + Fluff - Plot = Win!

[skitty_kat]

Oh, very nice. I look forward to reading more.
I do have one slight criticism (though please don't take it badly): there're too many 'he's and 'him's. It gets a little confusing as to who's doing what. Use their names more often; we can take it. :)
Other than that: *mwah*. Fabulous! I adore domestic!Apollo/Midnighter. They can kill thousands but when they're together they're just love.

[sufferingfool]

LOL I have to agree to that criticism. I'm not writing enough fics to remember to use names. LOL It'll improve, I promise ;) As I get better again!

Glad you liked it! :D

[travelincognito]

*fans self* Apollo and Midnighter... fluffy sex... too damn good!

[mechanicaljewel]

I think "domestic" Apollo and Midnighter is about the closest thing this fandom has to a forbidden kink. Everything else seems plausible, but this is the one thing that they totally deserve but could never make work. Great job!

[sufferingfool]

I know! Midnighter could never keep his fists to himself, and even Apollo would get bored. Ah, maybe one day, when they are old and grey and nodding by the fire, as Yeats would say :p THANK YOU!