Comments | the_vernacular: LJ Idol Topic #4: Cracks

the_vernacular

LJ Idol Topic #4: Cracks

Feb 17, 2011 00:53

They make me mop the floors.

They call this Level Five. It’s called Level Five not because it’s five stories up, but because it’s five stories down. The lowest level in this subterranean prison.

( Cut for graphic descriptions of violence, gore, and physical pain. )

lj idol, fiction

Comments 82

roina_arwen February 17 2011, 06:10:18 UTC

Wow. Violent but excellent. I want to know where the chute goes! *pout*

the_vernacular February 17 2011, 14:56:57 UTC

It goes to the same place that Joe's boss went in my other story!

Just kidding!

Thank you! I was a bit torn about posting this, it's way out of my usual comfort zone.

ecosopher February 17 2011, 08:06:53 UTC

Parts of this had me cringing, but I loved the descriptions; the world you created is so easy to envisage. Really well done.

the_vernacular February 17 2011, 15:01:39 UTC

Thank you so much! I was a little worried about this one since it's way outside of my usual comfort zone, so I am glad you liked it!

supremegoddess1 February 17 2011, 14:05:04 UTC

wow!

the_vernacular February 17 2011, 15:01:58 UTC

I hope that is a good wow!

wyliekat February 17 2011, 17:45:14 UTC

This character is awesome. I love her spunk and determination. I felt myself rooting for her.

the_vernacular February 17 2011, 18:01:46 UTC

Oh, neat! She's actually a character who first made an appearance in something I wrote when I was fourteen years old, and promptly did nothing else with, until I saw this topic and she was prodding at my brain, being all, like "pick me! pick me! You could write me so much better now than when you were a kid!"

I hope I did her justice!

Thanks so much for the nice comment.

shadowwolf13 February 17 2011, 20:58:56 UTC

Oh so twisted and creepy ... and wonderful. :)

the_vernacular February 17 2011, 21:15:22 UTC

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it!