LJ Idol Topic #26a: Turtles All The Way Down, Take 2.

[the_vernacular]

Six days before I left for boarding school, Gran tried to make me leave Doggy Bear behind. She kept telling me that girls my age didn’t have stuffed animals and everyone would think I was a baby if I showed up with a raggy-eared dog-bear-thing. Eventually, I hid him at the bottom of my trunk and figured that if that was true, I’d hide him under

Comments

[ecosopher]

I liked the alternative voices in this. And teenaged girls... ooh, but they're something, aren't they?

[the_vernacular]

They really are! They pretty much seemed like the perfect people to use to illustrate the scorpion's point. Can't change human nature that easily!

[alephz]

Holy wow.

I really love the two character arcs going on here and the moral of the story.

Even if stories don't necessarily have to have them.

[the_vernacular]

Thanks! And I think the other story does have a moral, it's just not such a simple and tidy one.

[hosticle_fifer]

Excellent piece! I loved the dual perspective, and the new method of telling the turtle and scorpion story.

Speaking of scorpions, the ending was awesome.

[the_vernacular]

Thank you so much!

Yeah, one of the pieces of advice that I got repeatedly was that people liked the story-within-a-story aspect of the old piece, so I wanted to push that further here.

[sharya]

This was really wonderfully done. And not just the story - visually, I really appreciated the different colours separating the different voices.

[the_vernacular]

Thanks! I did that in my intersection with mstrobel to make it clear in a first-person narrative that the perspective had shifted, so when one of my friends found it confusing in this story, I did it again.

[comedychick]

Oh! I definitely like this version much more than the other one. And that's a stunning ending, too.

[the_vernacular]

Thank you! And yeah, this is a more cohesive story, I think.