LJ Idol Topic #26b: Grip

[the_vernacular]

It was our first night in the new house.

Well, new-old-house. Jared called it a "fixer-upper." I called it Thirteen-Thirteen Mockingbird Lane. It was big, drafty, and creaked with every step. The wallpaper was faded and torn; the ceiling corners were dusted with cobwebs. The basement was one of those cold, damp, dirt-floor cellars, and it

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[alephz]

Um.

UM.

-shudders-

[the_vernacular]

Oh no! Poor alephz!

[joeymichaels]

Holy cats! Sometime if you want to be COMPLETELY creeped out, search for the one minute or so long horror movie "Bedfellows" on YouTube (Warning - really qutie scary)!

I was so creeped out for your heroine and was glad that the ending was comparably benign. THIS TIME! HOLY CATS!

[the_vernacular]

Oooh, okay, I will do that.

And hee, thanks. I was going for the "Scary Stories to Tell in the Dark" vibe, where pretty much every story ends with "AND THERE WAS NOTHING THERE!" or "AND IT TURNED OUT HE HAD BEEN DEAD ALL ALONG" or whatever.

[joeymichaels]

I love those stories. Best campfire stories are the ones that end with something really creepy, but no blood or death.

[nyxocity]

You know, I had a feeling when he grabbed her so tight and didn't answer that it wasn't him. And yet you managed to make it chilling despite my thinking that.

[the_vernacular]

Hee, thank you! Yeah, I didn't want it to be a surprise at the end so much as trying to write with the campfire story vibe.

[wyliekat]

EEEP! That's totally creepy and awesome!

[java_fiend]

Oh very deliciously creepy. Really, really nicely done. I thought you played it perfectly. Nice job.