Comments | the_tenzo: Held in Trust: Chapter 22

the_tenzo

Held in Trust: Chapter 22

Apr 09, 2009 19:16

Title: Held in Trust (22/?)
Characters/Pairings: Duplicate Tenth Doctor/Rose, alt!Donna, various Tylers and Motts, and several OCs
Rating: Teen
Series: Part of the Morris Minor 'Verse
Beta: platypus , defender of commas the world over
Summary: An Alt!Ten, Rose and Alt!Donna Adventure! Join our heroes as they investigate a mysterious man from the future ( Read more... )

character(s): ten2/rose, genre: action/adventure, character(s): original, length: novel, fic series: morris minor 'verse, character(s): donna, fic: held in trust, genre: sci-fi

Comments 14

tempusdominus10 April 9 2009, 23:45:59 UTC

HEh. This just keeps getting better.

the_tenzo April 10 2009, 15:49:50 UTC

Thank you :D

ladychi April 10 2009, 02:34:08 UTC

I SHIP IT. I OVERNIGHT SHIP IT.

You're so easily able to predict my emotions, it's kind of ridiculous. And Yay for Rose & Donna (did you decide to bring them back when you originally planned to? I hope so).

This was a great read. I laughed out loud at this part:

"Yes, quite. Good thinking," the Doctor replied breezily, and Crede shot him a look. "By which I mean to say: Of course that's good thinking, as you are so terribly clever."

It's just so Ten. Next chapter please! Ha!

the_tenzo April 10 2009, 15:51:28 UTC

I SHIP IT. I OVERNIGHT SHIP IT.

I KNEW YOU WOULD!

My whole crisis over when to bring Rose and Donna back was whether it should be chapter 22 or 23. It was planned as 23. Then I got a case of the "OMG everybody hates me because I'm supposedly writing a Doctor/Rose fic and yet Rose has been gone for 5 chapters!". But it didn't make sense narratively. So then I got over myself, with your help. They're back in Chapter 23 where they belong.

platypus April 10 2009, 03:18:29 UTC

Glad I could help :).

(One typo snuck through: But if you tried telling that girl anything and she'd just wind up implying that she was somehow different from the rest of us. Extraneous 'and' :).)

Off to read backwards...

the_tenzo April 10 2009, 15:48:00 UTC

Oooh thank you!

jaradel April 10 2009, 03:59:46 UTC

Elpis is a well-rounded character already, and this is only her second chapter. Your characterisation of the Doctor is, as always, spot-on. And I gather after what he just found out, we're going to see The Oncoming Storm pretty soon.

the_tenzo April 10 2009, 15:53:45 UTC

There may be some light rain, yeah. *whistles*

ladychi pointed out (and then through no fault of her own made me paranoid) that Elpis might have a touch of the Sue in her. It wasn't my intention at all but it seems like every time you write a female OC who's in any way sympathetic, someone's going to think it's a Sue. But I'm glad you like her!

the_tenzo April 10 2009, 15:54:47 UTC

Though I should clarify that Chi didn't think she was a Sue, she was just concerned that she might come off that way to someone seeing Sues under every rock.

jaradel April 11 2009, 01:14:14 UTC

I don't see the Sue at this point, but I don't know where you're taking her either, so as far as I can see right now, she's intriguing.

I have trouble writing female OCs too, and I don't know why, other than that I relate better to guys. I do have a female main character in my original fiction, but I have a fairly clear vision of her personality, and I hope that keeps her from being the generic female lead.

unfolded73 April 10 2009, 04:59:24 UTC

Ooh, some questions starting to get answered! I continue to be insanely curious about what's going to happen next.

the_tenzo April 10 2009, 16:03:22 UTC

Thanks for sticking with it!