Ranch

[the_panic_light]

Good morning, ladies and gentlemen. I have re-entered the creative writing competition, brigits_flame for another month; now that university is over, I can spend much more time on it.

Sadly this week has been quite busy in its own right, so I haven't been able to devote much time to this one - in quality, if not quantity.

Anyway, this week's theme was...

Comments

[cedarwolfsinger]

OK, not fair! I want to know what "IT" is! Good work!

[the_panic_light]

Heh, thank you! And it's a mystery! ;]

[ephemeralbreath]

Wow. That ending was really intense. I found the changing PoVs quite interesting.

I'm surprised you could get so much done without having much time!

[the_panic_light]

I'm glad you enjoyed it, thank you for your comment! :]

[pipisafoat]

If she'd thought it was stifling in my car even with the air conditioning on
It was so bright she had to squint her eyes nearly shut until she put my sunglasses on
Quick typo grab - in her car, put her sunglasses on.

Also, at the end, do you really mean 'reviled', or are you looking for 'relieved'?

I'm with Cedar, though - what is it?

[the_panic_light]

Ah, that's because I decided to change one of the narratives from first to third person at the last minute - thanks for noticing those.

And instead of "reviled" I mean "revolted"...dang.

[merthin]

Whew! I think I got sunstroke just from reading it. :-) Excellent descriptions as always and I really enjoyed the colloquial speech patterns of the rancher. I hope you plan to continue this at some point. My guess for what "it" is would be a fire-breathing spider. ;-)