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HHF ENTRY: Into the Haze, Part 3

Nov 03, 2008 19:10

HORRIFYING HALLOWEEN FIC ENTRY
Title: Into the Haze
Author: ciwey
Rating: NC-17 for excessive swearing and depiction of violence
Summary: A night at the Gamma Rho Fraternity House turns out to be hell.
Disclaimer: This never happened.
Author’s Notes: Angsty College!Mavid. Based on the Cold Case episode "The Promise". Comments and constructive ( Read more... )

horrifying halloween fic entry, fanfic: nc-17

Comments 21

fictionarie November 3 2008, 18:08:26 UTC

Oh my lord that was good. I found it so hard to read, it was making me so uncomfortable at times but in the good way.

ciwey November 4 2008, 07:46:02 UTC

I'm sorry it made you uncomfortable, but that was sort of the intention, heh. Good to know it was in the good way though. And yay, compliment. :D

Thanks for reading the fic and leaving a comment! I really appreciate that. :)

Deleted and reposted to fix a typo. x)

actress_is_me November 4 2008, 02:06:52 UTC

...
it just ends there?!?!?!

WHAT?!?!?!

ciwey November 4 2008, 07:59:50 UTC

I hope that's a positive comment. :I

xwhatxitxisxhox December 9 2008, 00:50:37 UTC

I KNOWWW!
I WANT MOREEE

lmao.
*is a month late in responding to this comment*

but that last croak of "Mikey?" means he's alive, right?!

matertenebrarum November 4 2008, 02:32:29 UTC

dude, it seemed like i was holding my breath for that entire last part. fuck.

i feel like the hunter situation is unresolved. i would've loved if they passed by his burning corpse as they made their way out.

i am picturing mike like burned!nathan from heroes.

i'm glad you didn't have dave confess his love for mike and then have them make out while surrounded with flames. thanks for that.

ciwey November 4 2008, 07:56:23 UTC

I'm beyond flattered, really. Thanks so much for reading the fic and leaving a comment. <3

I'm actually not much of a fan of tying up all loose ends, so I tend to leave more than a few factors undone. I mean, if I don't see a reason in explaining what happened next after that, I probably won't go into it just for the sake of that.

In my version of events, Hunter did manage to make it out of the burning fraternity house, though you can be sure he's not going to fare too well after this incident.

I pictured Mike to be more defaced than that, actually, though your version of him does sound more appealing. To each their own, I guess? :)

And yeah, I'm glad you agree with me on this. x)

I'm kind of a stickler (is that the right term for it? I don't know) for realism and accuracy, so I really dislike it when they act unnaturally (or even out of character) just for the sake of advancing a plot. Which is sort of why this developed into the whole 24k words, I suppose.

Again, thanks for reading and commenting!

micheleeeex November 4 2008, 03:06:07 UTC

you ended it there?!?!?!?!??!?

omg, i loved this.♥

ciwey November 4 2008, 07:59:19 UTC

Yeah, that was kind of an abrupt ending, wasn't it? I felt like elaborating any further as to their survivals would have ruined the moment of the scene though, so I decided to just leave things at that and not follow up with a Two Weeks Later scene I had originally planned (though at that stage of planning, David was actually going to die of smoke inhalation once he made it out of the house).

Thanks for reading and leaving a comment, and I'm glad you liked it. :)

flikfab November 5 2008, 02:44:48 UTC

It is really well written, the plotting is dead on. I have seen most of that Cold Case epi and I can see where you got the inspiration from.
But oh my life that is heavy, It is a bit too horrific for me. People can indeed be the biggest monsters.
Glad that you wrote it tho and once I started it I had to read it all.

ciwey November 9 2008, 10:57:32 UTC

Thanks for reading and leaving a comment. I really appreciate it. :)

Yay, I'm glad somebody who's seen the episode (besides those I've already pimped it to) like this. I thought I did a well enough job trying to differentiate it from the original episode instead of making a direct parallel - with the exception of that invitation scene, I suppose. *cringes*

People can indeed be the biggest monsters.
And yes, I agree with this so hard - one of my personal fascinations is the human psyche and how much (or little) one can value the fact that other people are people just like ourselves, with their own life, hopes, dreams and such.

Once again, thanks for reading through all three parts and 24k words of it. x)